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The line graph shows the sales of children’ books, adult’s fictions and educational books between 2002 and2006 in one country. v.1

The line graph shows the sales of children’ books, adult’s fictions and educational books between 2002 and2006 in one country. v. 1
The internet has become a daily need, as crucial as anything else. With today's internet, we are far ahead of three generations. It has made people come together. It made everything flexible, quick and easy. You can access everything from a tip of your finger. On the positive side, for instance, if you want to go to a new place and explore, with the help of it you can get the list of attractions, places to stay, different restaurants of food, etc. You feel sick, can make an appointment, order medicines, book a cab, etc. You're starving, and lazy to prepare food, can put together food of your choice, they deliver it to you within minutes. You can pay online bills, etc. You can reserve a vehicle for business related meetings or a trip, you can pay for what you use. Be in touch with family members across the globe. Parents are less concerned, when in regular touch. On the contrary, you can meet strangers, chat with them on social media accounts, date them. You can hack social accounts, bank information, etc. You can watch YouTube videos, porn, play games, etc. In such cases, people are tending to communicate less with family, and much involved in illegal activities. In conclusion, although the internet has made it possible to communicate with people anywhere in the world with just a click of a button, it has given rise to various new issues which can have detrimental effects on a person’s life. Hence, we should be cautious while chatting over the Internet and investigate unknown people before interacting with them.
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today
's internet, we are far ahead of three generations. It has made
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people
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come
together. It made everything flexible, quick and easy. You can access everything from a tip of your finger.

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positive
side,
for instance
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help
of it you can
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the list of attractions, places to stay,
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different
restaurants of food, etc. You feel sick, can
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make
an appointment, order medicines, book a cab, etc. You're starving, and lazy to prepare food, can put together food of your choice, they deliver it to you within minutes.
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can pay online bills, etc.
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You
can reserve a vehicle for business related meetings or a trip, you can pay for what you
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use
. Be in touch with family members across the globe. Parents are less concerned, when in regular touch.

On the contrary
, you can
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meet
strangers, chat with them on social media accounts, date them. You can hack social accounts, bank information, etc. You can
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watch
YouTube videos, porn, play games, etc. In such cases,
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people
are tending to communicate less with family, and much involved in illegal activities.

In conclusion
, although the internet has made it possible to communicate with
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people
anywhere in the world with
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just
a click of a button, it has
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given
rise to various new issues which can have detrimental effects on a person’s life.
Hence
, we should be cautious while chatting over the Internet and investigate unknown
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people
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before
interacting with them.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The line graph shows the sales of children’ books, adult’s fictions and educational books between 2002 and2006 in one country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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