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1. What is your full name? 2. Show your identification. 3. Are you from a small town or a big city? 4. Tell something about your city. 5. Why do you like it? 6. What do you like the most about your city? 7. How are people in your city? 8. How do you spen v.1

1. What is your full name? 2. Show your identification. 3. Are you from a small town or a big city? 4. Tell something about your city. 5. Why do you like it? 6. What do you like the most about your city? 7. How are people in your city? 8. How do you spen v. 1
With growing generation and new developments everyone is busy with their life and their performance due to which they hardly take a longer vacation. The employer can take steps to give their workers a long period holiday to give them motivation to work better. I strongly agree with it and in this essay I would put out my point of view with suitable examples. Firstly, employees are the backbone of any organisation, to keep them motivated to task is mot important. As if they are not happy or motivated in their trial the production and the quality of the products can drop drastically. With the new generation, they are more engaged in their jobs to achieve the success that they don't spend enough time with their family or loved ones which also create distance between them. Due to busy schedules, it also make workers frustrated and which is also harmful for their health. Secondly, If workers are giving long period of vacation it help in improving their health as well as its benefit organisation. For instance, Due to heavy work load and not related mind one don't get enough good ideas which can benefit companies and also make them tired or bored with their work. If there is long vacation one can relax their mind and more importantly, they can spend more quality time with their family and loved ones. Also with calm mind one can get great ideas which can help with the improvement of the organisation. To summarize, there is saying " Time is Money" Due to which many peoples neglect their quality time, which they could spend with their family instead they effort the whole day and night, which instead of helping harm their health, but I believe that having a long holiday helps both individual as well as their organisation to improve their productivity.
With growing generation and new developments everyone is busy with their life and their performance
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to which they hardly take a longer vacation. The employer can take steps to give their workers a
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long
period holiday to give them motivation to work better. I
strongly
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agree
with it and in this essay I would put out my point of view with suitable examples.

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enough
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loved
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ones
which
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create distance between them.
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to busy schedules, it
also
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workers frustrated and which is
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harmful for their health.

Secondly
, If workers are giving
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period of vacation it
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as its benefit
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them tired or bored with their work. If there is
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vacation one can relax their mind and more
importantly
, they can spend more quality
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time
with their family and
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with the improvement of the
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To summarize
, there is saying
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is Money
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peoples neglect their quality
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time
, which they could spend with their family
instead
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the whole day and night, which
instead
of helping harm their health,
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I believe that having a
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holiday
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both individual
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as well as
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their productivity.
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IELTS essay 1. What is your full name? 2. Show your identification. 3. Are you from a small town or a big city? 4. Tell something about your city. 5. Why do you like it? 6. What do you like the most about your city? 7. How are people in your city? 8. How do you spen v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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