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1-Some believe that people Should get a job right after school. Others say they should attend university. Discuss both views and state your opinion. v.1

1-Some believe that people Should get a job right after school. Others say they should attend university. v. 1
Recently, bicycles have been making headlines in the regional and state levels every now and then. Countries who are known for expansion also keep a budget for transportation sector from a significant number of years to promote the bicycle ride and push people to make their ride as default to commute. Well, as far as the topic of bicycle is concerned, it all comes down to the current infrastructure of the country itself. However, existing quality of roads and transportation may decide whether countries should lock a specific budget for bicycles or shift the focal point towards the solution of traffic jams. In addition, If countries transportation system is well equipped with today's top notch technology. The public should take advantage of such facilities provided by the government at the federal or provincial level for long term trips in the area or in province/state. On the other hand, the authorities should also think that to some extend bicycle usage can be reduced to a certain percentage. For Instance, people may ride a bicycle to commute to the work within the certain radius of 15 KM or less. Furthermore, governments can run several campaigns in schools and other public spots where a message can be delivered through a proper medium about bicycles, specifically how a two wheel ride can prolong your health and keep you away from several health issues: For Example: Joint pain, cardio problems and so on. Traffic jams and long queues may take a specific time period to reduce congestion levels to the lowest of all time. Nevertheless, authorities can implement the following rules in order to reduction of the traffic on the roads. Increase the taxes on the cars and age limit on the candidates who are willing to sit behind the wheel. At the age of 18. Next, all the major transportation facilities fare should be reduced and make it in the reach of all the commuters and build more bus, tram and train stops nearby, the closer they are the more likely they will be used by the general public. In the conclusion, I firmly believe that countries spending for bicycles outweighs traffic congestions however, countries should also use a strategy to motivate a general public on the benefits wing rather than an ad. Lastly, building, train, tram and bus stops from the ground may bury government's budget.
Recently,
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bicycles
have been making headlines in the regional and state levels every
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now
and then.
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Countries
who
are known
for expansion
also
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keep
a budget for
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transportation
sector from a significant number of years to promote the
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bicycle
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ride
and push
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people
to
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make
their
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ride
as default to commute.

Well, as far as the topic of
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bicycle
is concerned
, it all
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comes
down to the
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current
infrastructure of the
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country
itself.
However
, existing quality of roads and
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transportation
may decide whether
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countries
should lock a specific budget for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bicycles
or shift the focal point towards the solution of traffic jams.
In addition
, If
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countries
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transportation
system is
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well equipped
with
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today
's
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top notch
technology. The public should take advantage of such facilities provided by the
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government
at the federal or provincial level for long term trips in the area or in province/state.
On the other hand
, the authorities should
also
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think
that to
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some
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extend
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bicycle
usage can be
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reduced
to a certain percentage.
For Instance
,
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people
may
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ride
a
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bicycle
to commute to the work within the certain radius of 15 KM or less.
Furthermore
,
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governments
can run several campaigns in schools and other public spots where a message can
be delivered
through a proper medium about
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bicycles
,
specifically
how a two wheel
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ride
can prolong your health and
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keep
you away from several health issues:
For Example
: Joint pain, cardio problems and
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so
on.

Traffic jams and long queues may take a specific time period to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
congestion levels to the lowest of all time.
Nevertheless
, authorities can implement the following
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
in order to reduction of the traffic on the roads. Increase the taxes on the cars and age limit on the candidates who are willing to sit behind the wheel. At the age of 18.
Next
, all the major
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transportation
facilities fare should be
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reduced
and
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make
it in the reach of all the commuters and build more bus, tram and train
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stops
nearby, the closer they are the more likely they will be
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used
by the
Consider using "public".
general public
.

In the conclusion, I
firmly
believe that
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countries
spending for
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bicycles
outweighs traffic congestions
however
,
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countries
should
also
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use
a strategy to motivate a
Consider using "public".
general public
on the benefits wing
rather
than an ad.
Lastly
, building, train, tram and bus
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stops
from the ground may bury
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government
's budget.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Federico Fellini

IELTS essay 1-Some believe that people Should get a job right after school. Others say they should attend university. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
393 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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