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1. Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

1. Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. with this statement? v. 1
Some people believe that parents of children who attend private schools do not need to contribute to state schools through taxes. Personally, I completely disagree with this view. For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to reduce taxes for families who pay for private schools. Firstly, it would be difficult to calculate the correct amount of tax reduction for these families, and staff would be required to manage this complex process. Secondly, we all pay a certain amount of tax for public services. For example, some people are fortunate enough not to have to call the police or fire brigade at any time in their lives, but they do not expect a tax reduction for this. Finally, if wealthy families were given a tax discount for sending their children to private schools, we might have a situation where the poorer people pay higher taxes than the rich. In my opinion, we all should be happy to pay our share of the money that supports the public schools. It would be beneficial for all members of our society to have a high-quality education system with equal opportunities for young people. This will result in a well-educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation. Parents of children in private schools may see the advantages of this in their own lives. For instance, a company owner may need well-qualified and competent staff, and a well-funded education system can provide such employees. In conclusion, I do not believe that a reduction in financial concessions should be made for those who choose private schools.
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believe that parents of children who attend
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do not need to contribute to state
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Firstly
, it would be difficult to calculate the correct amount of
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reduction for these families, and staff would
be required
to manage this complex process.
Secondly
, we all
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pay
a certain amount of
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tax
for public services.
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discount for sending their children to
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higher
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than the rich.

In my opinion, we all should be happy to
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our share of the money that supports the public
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schools
. It would be beneficial for all members of our society to have a high-quality education system with equal opportunities for young
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people
. This will result in a well-educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation. Parents of children in
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private
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may
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the advantages of this in their
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lives
.
For instance
, a
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owner may need well-qualified and competent staff, and a well-funded education system can provide such employees.

In conclusion
, I do not believe that a reduction in financial concessions should
be made
for those who choose
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private
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.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay 1. Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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