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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. with this statement? v. 1
Some people believe that parents whose children study in non government institutions, do not have to pay a part of their taxes which belongs to educational part. I strongly disagree with this idea and I believe that everyone should support free schooling system. There are several reasons, why all people should pay tax completely. In order to live in a fair society, where everyone is treated equally, it is necessary to contribute to the society irrespective of their private schooling. By doing this, they are providing equal learning opportunities to every single person in their nation. For example, in the UK, the education system is well organized and the children receive proper education and knowledge similar to the students in the private institution, which is considered to be a fair system. If parents do not support the learning system by taxing, there seems to be a demotivation among the families would have access to the best learning opportunities. This kind of inequality, ultimately lead to success of some but harm the prospects of others. In my opinion, we all should be happy to pay our taxes entirely, even if we do not send our children to public schools. Even wealthy families, who do not need to the public educational systemsystem, live in this community and suffer from its problem such as criminal behaviour. In order to reduce these problems, public educational system should be promoted. As a result, having a good public education system is useful for all of us, either we send our children to public or private schools. In conclusion, for all reasons mentioned above, I believe that the families whose children study at non public school should still be obligated to pay taxes to help state schools.
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believe that parents whose
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children
study in non
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government
institutions, do not
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have to
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pay
a part of their
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taxes
which belongs to educational part. I
strongly
disagree with this
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idea
and I believe that everyone should support free schooling system.

There are several reasons, why all
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people
should
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pay
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tax
completely. In order to
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live
in a
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fair
society, where everyone
is treated
equally
, it is necessary to contribute to the society irrespective of their private schooling. By doing this, they are providing equal learning opportunities to every single person in their nation.
For example
, in the UK, the education
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system
is well organized and the
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children
receive proper education and knowledge similar to the students in the private institution, which
is considered
to be a
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fair
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system
. If parents do not support the learning
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system
by taxing, there seems to be a
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demotivation
among the families would have access to the best learning opportunities. This kind of inequality,
ultimately
lead to success of
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some
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harm the prospects of others.

In my opinion, we all should be happy to
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pay
our
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taxes
entirely
, even if we do not
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send
our
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children
to
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public
schools. Even wealthy families, who do not need to the
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public
educational
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systemsystem
,
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live
in this community and suffer from its problem such as criminal
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behaviour
. In order to
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reduce
these problems,
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public
educational
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system
should
be promoted
.
As a result
, having a
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good
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public
education
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system
is useful for all of us, either we
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send
our
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children
to
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public
or private schools.

In conclusion
, for all reasons mentioned above, I believe that the families whose
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children
study at non
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public
school should
still
be obligated
to
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pay
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taxes
to
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help
state schools.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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