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01/11/2017Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v.1

01/11/2017Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 1
The parents raise a kid differently. Each family has its rules. It appears if we compare families living in a different country. For example, if children make a mistake the punishment would not be the same because of the type of growth and culture. The children who have strict rules cannot feel free. Because when children want to do anything there will be something in his or her mind to restrict them. Because restricted things would be interesting for children and it makes them curious, even if they are dangerous so it can be affected them negatively. However, their family thinks that it is true since they got grew with this mindset which is known as old-fashioned these days. According to that thought, it leads them to not improved themselves, which is efficient for their future and consequently they won't shape their life as much as they want so they will be unsuccessful during their life. On the other hand, the children who grow free learn anything from experience when they are young. For example, when they get control of deciding something at home that would be important for them. At best, they would find out if things are good or bad. At worst, the family would be there to teach properly. Those experiences contribute to their lives as a reward. Besides, giving opportunity makes them feel more valuable which is significant for their self-confidence. In my opinion, children should grow by knowing the difference between good and bad. Strict rules won't be prevented what they want to do.
The parents raise a kid
differently
. Each
family
has its
rules
. It appears if we compare
families
living in a
different
country.
For example
, if
children
make
a mistake the punishment would not be the same
because
of the type of growth and culture.

The
children
who have strict
rules
cannot feel free.
Because
when
children
want to do anything there will be something in
his or her
mind to restrict them.
Because
restricted things would be interesting for
children
and it
makes
them curious, even if they are
dangerous
so
it can be
affected
them
negatively
.
However
, their
family
thinks
that it is true since they
got
grew with this mindset which
is known
as
old
-fashioned these days. According to that
thought
, it leads them to not
improved
themselves, which is efficient for their future and
consequently
they won't shape their life as much as they want
so
they will be unsuccessful during their life.

On the other hand
, the
children
who grow free learn anything from experience when they are young.
For example
, when they
get
control of deciding something at home that would be
important
for them. At best, they would find out if things are
good
or
bad
. At worst, the
family
would be there to teach
properly
. Those experiences contribute to their
lives
as a reward.
Besides
, giving opportunity
makes
them feel more valuable which is significant for their self-confidence.

In my opinion,
children
should grow by knowing the difference between
good
and
bad
. Strict
rules
won't be
prevented
what they want to do.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 01/11/2017Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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