01/10/2017 Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent v.2
01/10/2017 Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. 2
Many agree the advancement of big supermarkets drives small companies out of business. The trend is believed may have an adverse influence on local communities. I disagree with the prospect and the reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details below.
On the one hand, the appearance of big department stores in a neighborhood may be seen as an omen. Firstly, disappearing of small firms that are unable to compete with the giants means there is less money in a local budget; thus, the government cannot finance many social programs that used to help maintain local communities’ well-being. Secondly, places owned by local entrepreneurs often attract public that may interact with one another and learn about gossips, while buying something or being served. If those places are closed, it means fewer interactions between locals and thus the death of the community. Those are several adverse consequences of the trend.
On the other hand, the closure of small businesses may not have a disadvantageous effect. Primarily, the advent of big companies may rather revitalize a neighborhood because many well-established businesses often invest heavily in improving local communities. For example, OSHA that is a Russian chain of department stores usually constructs a park with a playground nearby their novel stores to attract families who may combine visiting the store with playing in the park. Furthermore, the existence of a community is usually based on living on the same territory and having similar interests.
Thus, those who share the passion to pets, reading books or repairing cars will continue to communicate with each other even if all local businesses suddenly disappear. Consequently, the life of community will last. In other words, the death of local companies doesn’t necessarily lead to the death of community that used to host them.
In conclusion, the claim the closure of small firms may destroy local communities appears to be unsound because communities are held by similar interests. Moreover, the advent of big malls may improve the life in the neighborhood.
Many
agree
the advancement of
big
supermarkets drives
small
companies
out of
business
. The trend
is believed
may have an adverse influence on
local
communities
. I disagree with the prospect and the reasons on which my stance
is based
will
be discussed
in
details
below.
On the one hand, the appearance of
big
department
stores
in a neighborhood may be
seen
as an omen.
Firstly
, disappearing of
small
firms that are unable to compete with the giants means there is less money in a
local
budget;
thus
, the
government
cannot finance
many
social programs that
used
to
help
maintain
local
communities’
well-being.
Secondly
, places
owned
by
local
entrepreneurs
often
attract public that may interact with one another and learn about gossips, while buying something or
being served
. If those places
are closed
, it means fewer interactions between
locals
and
thus
the death of the
community
. Those are several adverse consequences of the trend.
On the other hand
, the closure of
small
businesses
may not have a disadvantageous effect.
Primarily
, the advent of
big
companies
may
rather
revitalize a neighborhood
because
many
well-established
businesses
often
invest
heavily
in improving
local
communities
.
For example
, OSHA
that is
a Russian chain of department
stores
usually
constructs a park with a playground nearby their novel
stores
to attract families who may combine visiting the
store
with playing in the park.
Furthermore
, the existence of a
community
is
usually
based on living on the same territory and having similar interests.
Thus
, those who share the passion to pets, reading books or repairing cars will continue to communicate with each other even if all
local
businesses
suddenly
disappear.
Consequently
, the life of
community
will last.
In other words
, the death of
local
companies
doesn’t
necessarily
lead to the death of
community
that
used
to host them.
In conclusion
, the claim the closure of
small
firms may
destroy
local
communities
appears to be unsound
because
communities
are held
by similar interests.
Moreover
, the advent of
big
malls may
improve
the life in the neighborhood.
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