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The chart below gives information on how much people in the United States and United Kingdom spend on petrol v.2

The chart below gives information on how much people in the United States and United Kingdom spend on petrol v. 2
The line graph illustrates the expenditures of America and the United Kingdom on petrol. Overall, the poorest Americans have a higher percentage of income on fuel, whereas in the United Kingdom the wealthier people are spending more. The United States of America as people have a lower percentage of income the amount of money spent on petrol started as the highest to just above 5% but experience a continuous gradual decrease until it reaches the richest category to nearly 3 %. By contrast, in the United Kingdom, the values went up consistently from the poorest level and as people get higher income. The figures recorded from just under 1% and peak at around 4% respectively. The richest people in both countries have an equal proportion on which accounts for nearly 4% but eventually continuous to decline for the USA to approximately just above 2% and the UK slightly decreases to nearly 3%.
The line graph illustrates the expenditures of America and the
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Kingdom on petrol.

Overall
, the poorest Americans have a higher percentage of income on fuel, whereas in the
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Kingdom the wealthier
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people
are spending more.

The
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States of America as
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people
have a lower percentage of income the amount of money spent on petrol
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started
as the highest to
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just
above 5%
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but
experience a continuous gradual decrease until it reaches the richest category to
nearly
3 %. By contrast, in the
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United
Kingdom, the values went up
consistently
from the poorest level and as
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people
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get
higher income. The figures recorded from
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just
under 1% and peak at around 4%
respectively
.

The richest
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people
in both countries have an equal proportion on which accounts for
nearly
4%
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but
eventually
continuous to decline for the USA to approximately
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just
above 2% and the UK
slightly
decreases to
nearly
3%.
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IELTS academic The chart below gives information on how much people in the United States and United Kingdom spend on petrol v. 2

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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