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The charts show the amount and quality of water supplied to two regions of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The charts show the amount and quality of water supplied to two regions of the world
The chart illustrates the ratio of water availability and its cleanliness level in Australia and South-east Asia in the year 1990 and 2010. Overall, the majority of the Australian people are getting water supply, and the hygienic level of the water is far better than the SE Asian. According to the first chart, in 1990 80% of the Australian population has water supply but just more than a third of the South-east Asian only has proper supply. After 20 years, almost all population in Australia are in reach, and the significant proportion of Asians about 78% are within the range of supply. The supply percentile raised nearly a fifth in the context of Australia while in SE Asia it improved by doubled than Australia. Secondly, Australian water is almost 70% pure, which is 30% more than in Asia in 1990. The gradual improvement in the water resources improved the Australians water degree of cleanliness by more than 10% within 2 decades. Whereas, the South-east Asian peaked its distribution level but cannot maintain its hygiene and reduce its degree by a small proportion.
The chart illustrates the ratio of
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availability and its cleanliness level in Australia and South-east Asia in the year 1990 and 2010.

Overall
, the majority of the Australian
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people
are getting
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water
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supply
, and the hygienic level of the
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is far better than the SE Asian.

According to the
first
chart, in 1990 80% of the Australian population has
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more than a third of the South-east Asian
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has proper
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. After 20 years, almost all population in Australia are in reach, and the significant proportion of Asians about 78% are within the range of
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. The
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percentile raised
nearly
a fifth in the context of Australia while in SE Asia it
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improved
by
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doubled
than Australia.

Secondly
, Australian
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is almost 70% pure, which is 30% more than in Asia in 1990. The gradual improvement in the
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resources
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improved
the Australians
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degree of cleanliness by more than 10% within 2 decades. Whereas, the South-east Asian peaked its distribution level
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but
cannot maintain its hygiene and
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reduce
its degree by a
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proportion.
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IELTS academic The charts show the amount and quality of water supplied to two regions of the world

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4 paragraphs
182 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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