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Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000
A glance at these provided pie charts reveals the amount of fuel source used in both Australia and France from 1980 to 2000. On balance, during the period shown both the total electricity production in both Australia and France saw a noticeable rise. Comparable as their total units were, the figure for each fuel source was a remarkable exception. The largest segment in the pie chart of Australia in 1980 belonged to coal with 50 units followed by that in natural gas, hydropower, and nuclear power. Besides, the units of electricity by coal rose rapidly by 80 units and consistently ranked first in 2000. Meanwhile, the figure for nuclear power in France increased up to nine times. In France, electricity production by coal and gas shared a comparable figure, with accurately 25 units, and accounted the biggest one in 1980. Ultimately, while number of coal usage saw a modest growth to 25 units as same as that for oil, units of natural gas and hydropower fell to the minimum threshold, at only 2 units.
A glance at these provided pie charts reveals the amount of fuel source
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used
in both Australia and France from 1980 to 2000.

On balance, during the period shown both the total electricity production in both Australia and France
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saw
a noticeable rise. Comparable as their total
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units
were, the figure for each fuel source was a remarkable exception.

The largest segment in the pie chart of Australia in 1980 belonged to coal with 50
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units
followed by that in natural gas, hydropower, and nuclear power.
Besides
, the
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units
of electricity by coal rose
rapidly
by 80
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units
and
consistently
ranked
first
in 2000. Meanwhile, the figure for nuclear power in France increased up to nine times.

In France, electricity production by coal and gas shared a comparable figure, with
accurately
25
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units
, and accounted the biggest one in 1980.
Ultimately
, while number of coal usage
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saw
a modest growth to 25
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units
as same as that for oil,
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units
of natural gas and hydropower fell to the minimum threshold, at
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only
2
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units
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
174 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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