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This table shows the percentage of school aged boys in two different age groups who participated in 5 different sports in the UK in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

This table shows the percentage of school aged boys in two different age groups who participated in 5 different sports in the UK in 2010.
The table below compares two separated age groups in terms of the proportion of schoolboys who took part in 5 types of sports in UK in the year of 2010. Overall, the figure for 6-to-11-year-olds playing sports was higher than that of the 12-16 group, except from swimming, which shared the same amount. In addition, football was the most popular sport for both age group. While the percentage of boys aging between 6 and 11 participating in football was 87%, the 12-to-16-year-old football players accounted for 78% of the total value. 35% of males aging from 6 to 11 took part in basketball, compared to 25% of older age group players. Moreover, in comparison to the proportion of schoolboys in 12-16 group playing cricket, which reached 34%, that of 6-11 group was 45%. At that time, the rate of boys participating rugby in 6-to-11-year-olds was slightly higher than that of 12-16 group, at 23% and 21% respectively. Meanwhile, boys who had a tendency to swim from 6 to 11 years old occupied 19%, had an equal figure of that between 12 and 16 years old.
The table below compares two separated age
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groups
in terms of the proportion of schoolboys who
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took part
in 5 types of sports in UK in the year of 2010.

Overall
, the figure for 6-to-11-year-olds playing sports was higher than that of the 12-16
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group
, except from swimming, which shared the same amount.
In addition
, football was the most popular sport for both age group.

While the percentage of boys aging between 6 and 11 participating in football was 87%, the 12-to-16-year-
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football players accounted for 78% of the total value. 35% of males aging from 6 to 11
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took part
in basketball, compared to 25% of older age
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group
players.
Moreover
,
in comparison
to the proportion of schoolboys in 12-16
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group
playing cricket, which reached 34%, that of 6-11
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group
was 45%.

At that time, the rate of boys participating rugby in 6-to-11-year-olds was
slightly
higher than that of 12-16
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group
, at 23% and 21%
respectively
. Meanwhile, boys who had a tendency to swim from 6 to 11 years
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occupied 19%, had an equal figure of that between 12 and 16 years
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6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic This table shows the percentage of school aged boys in two different age groups who participated in 5 different sports in the UK in 2010.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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