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The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000. v.2

The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000. v. 2
The column chart compares the lowest and highest levels of Sulphur dioxide (SO2) and Dinitrous oxide (NO2), two air pollutants, in four cities, namely Los Angeles, Calcutta, Beijing and Mexico in 2000. Overall, the average presence of these two air polluting ingredients is much higher in Mexico than the other three cities. As is presented in the graph, the level of Sulphur dioxide in the air of Los Angeles ranges from 1 to 10 which is remarkably lower than that of other cities. The presence of this air pollutant varies from 80 to 200 in Mexico which is the highest. The minimum level of SO2 is 47 in Calcutta and 25 in Beijing but the maximum range goes as high as 130 in Beijing which is more than double than that of Calcutta city. On the other hand, the presence of the second air polluting material, Dinitrous oxide, on an average, could be found more in the Mexico City’s air than any other city provided in the illustration. The minimum level of N2O in Mexico is 113 which is almost ten times higher than that of Beijing and approximately four times higher than that of Calcutta and Los Angeles. The upper level of N2O is Los Angeles is higher than the presence of N2O in Calcutta and Beijing. In summary, the higher presence of Sulphur dioxide and Dinitrous oxide in Mexico reveal that air pollution in this city is worse than the three other cities.
The column chart compares the lowest and highest
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levels
of
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Sulphur
dioxide (SO2) and
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Dinitrous
oxide (NO2), two
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air
pollutants, in four
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cities
,
namely
Los Angeles, Calcutta, Beijing and Mexico in 2000.
Overall
, the average
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presence
of these two
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air
polluting ingredients is much higher in Mexico than the
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other
three cities.

As
is presented
in the graph, the
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level
of
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Sulphur
dioxide in the
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air
of Los Angeles ranges from 1 to 10 which is
remarkably
lower than that of
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other
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cities
. The
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presence
of this
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air
pollutant varies from 80 to 200 in Mexico which is the highest. The minimum
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level
of SO2 is 47 in Calcutta and 25 in Beijing
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the maximum range goes as high as 130 in Beijing which is more than double than that of Calcutta city. On the
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other
hand, the
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presence
of the second
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air
polluting material,
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Dinitrous
oxide, on an average, could
be found
more in the Mexico City’s
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air
than any
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other
city provided in the illustration. The minimum
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level
of N2O in Mexico is 113 which is almost ten times higher than that of Beijing and approximately four times higher than that of Calcutta and Los Angeles. The upper
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level
of N2O is Los Angeles is higher than the
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presence
of N2O in Calcutta and Beijing.

In summary, the higher
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presence
of
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Sulphur
dioxide and
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Dinitrous
oxide in Mexico reveal that
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air
pollution in this city is worse than the three
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other
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cities
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000. v. 2

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245 words
6.0
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