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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v.4

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v. 4
The illustration gives information on the possible places to construct a supermarket in Garlsdon. Overall, it is clearly shown that one of the possible sites of a supermarket is in the countryside while the other in the town centre. Firstly, it is apparent that the first site of the supermarket (S1) is located in the countryside where it is far away from the town centre and residential places. However, it is reachable by the public from the town centre and their housing areas by train and other transports on roads as there are a railway track and the main road connecting the supermarket and town centre. In addition, although it is located near to Hendon, its location is far away from Bransdon and Gransdon which have a higher population than Hindon. Turning to the second possible site of the supermarket (S2), it is apparent that, it is situated in the centre of the town where every citizen in the town can easily access. It is fairly convenient for those living in Hindon and Gransdon as there are two ways to reach it, either by train or through the main roads. On the other hand, those from Bransdon can only visit the supermarket through the main road.
The illustration gives information on the possible places to construct a supermarket in
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Garlsdon
.
Overall
, it is
clearly
shown that one of the possible sites of a supermarket is in the countryside while the other in the
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town
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centre
.

Firstly
, it is apparent that the
first
site of the supermarket (S1)
is located
in the countryside where it is far away from the
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town
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centre
and residential places.
However
, it is reachable by the public from the
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town
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centre
and their housing areas by train and other transports on
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roads
as there are a railway
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track
and the main
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road
connecting the supermarket and
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town
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centre
.
In addition
, although it
is located
near to
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Hendon
, its location is far away from
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Bransdon
and
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Gransdon
which have a higher population than
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Hindon
.

Turning to the second possible site of the supermarket (S2), it is apparent that, it
is situated
in the
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centre
of the
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town
where every citizen in the
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town
can
easily
access. It is
fairly
convenient for those living in
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Hindon
and
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Gransdon
as there are two ways to reach it, either by train or through the main
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roads
.
On the other hand
, those from
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Bransdon
can
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only
visit the supermarket through the main
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road
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS academic The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v. 4

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3 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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