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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v.3

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v. 3
The given map shows two possible locations for the planned supermarket in Garsdon City. As is presented in the illustration, the city has a population of more than 65 thousand and the two possible locations for the supermarket are near Hindon area and in the middle of the industrial area. Overall, the first location (S1) would be both away from the town centre and out of the crowd, which would be more convenient for the citizens of Hindson area, while the second location (S2) would be advantageous for the people of Bransdon and Cransdon area. According to the map, the railway surrounds the city and intersects the city almost in the middle. There are main roads for transportation and countryside surrounds the main housings and industries of the city. The housing of the city is mainly in the North and South sides of the city and the town centre is in the middle of the industrial area. The first possible location for the planned supermarket is near the Hindon area where almost ten thousand inhabitants live and the location is in the north-west corner. This location would be ideal for the Hindon people for shopping but the people of Crandon and Brandon, which have great more population, would be far away from this supermarket. The second possible location which is almost in the centre of the city would be surrounded by industrial zones and housings in the North and South sides of the city. This would be an ideal place as it would connect all the shoppers in the three parts of the city. Since the railway passes near this location, this would be a better place in terms of communication as well.
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Garsdon
City. As
is presented
in the illustration, the city has a population of more than 65 thousand and the two
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locations
for the supermarket are near
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Hindon
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area
and in the middle of the industrial area.

Overall
, the
first
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location
(S1) would be both away from the town
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centre
and out of the crowd, which would be more convenient for the citizens of
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Hindson
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area
, while the second
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location
(S2) would be advantageous for the
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people
of
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Bransdon
and
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Cransdon
area.

According to the map, the railway surrounds the city and intersects the city almost in the middle. There are main roads for transportation and countryside surrounds the main housings and industries of the city. The housing of the city is
mainly
in the North and South sides of the city and the town
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centre
is in the middle of the industrial
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. The
first
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possible
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location
for the planned supermarket is near the
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Hindon
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area
where almost ten thousand inhabitants
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live
and the
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location
is in the north-west corner. This
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location
would be ideal for the
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Hindon
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people
for shopping
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the
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of
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Crandon
and Brandon, which have great more population, would be far away from this supermarket. The second
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possible
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location
which is almost in the
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centre
of the city would
be surrounded
by industrial zones and housings in the North and South sides of the city. This would be an ideal place as it would connect all the shoppers in the three parts of the city. Since the railway passes near this
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location
, this would be a better place in terms of communication
as well
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS academic The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v. 3

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3 paragraphs
283 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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