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The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office.
The given tow diagrams illustrates the information regarding general features of AAA accountancy –main office and the status after renovation. In the first figure, front desk was right in front of the entrance in the south western corner and next to it in the northern side was the account office. Similarly, processing office and new customers office was planned to the alongside of the account office to the eastern side where there was a separate information desk, fax, and copier machine was planned in each of these office rooms along with the separate entrance gate. Apart from this, storage room was planned opposite to the processing room and the payroll office was in between the storage room and manager’s office of south east corner in the question. Finally, meeting room and lunch room was planned in the opposite to the manager’s room towards the northern east side according to the question. Over the period of time after renovation, front desk and storage room was dismantle and focused was given to larger the front desk in such place. Moreover, storage room was shifted in the northern west corner and a sofa set was planned in the place of storage room and payroll office. In addition to that, two larger size of information desk was planned in the area of processing and new customer office and a combine fax and photocopier machine along with an information desk was planned in the central of main office room. It is also worth noticing that the three separate room such as manager’s office, meeting room and the cafeteria were in the same location in the question.
The
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given
tow diagrams illustrates the
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information
regarding general features of AAA accountancy –main
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office
and the status after renovation.

In the
first
figure,
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front
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desk
was right in
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front
of the entrance in the south western corner and
next
to it in the northern side was the account
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office
.
Similarly
, processing
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office
and new
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customers
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office
was
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planned
to the alongside of the account
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office
to the eastern side where there was a separate
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information
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desk
, fax, and copier machine was
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planned
in each of these
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office
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rooms
along with the separate entrance gate. Apart from this,
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storage
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room
was
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planned
opposite to the processing
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room
and the payroll
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office
was in between the
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storage
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room
and manager’s
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office
of
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south east
corner in the question.
Finally
, meeting
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room
and lunch
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room
was
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planned
in the opposite to the manager’s
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room
towards the northern east side according to the question.

Over the period of time after renovation,
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front
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desk
and
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storage
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room
was
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dismantle
and focused was
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given
to larger the
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front
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desk
in such place.
Moreover
,
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storage
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room
was shifted
in the northern west corner and a sofa set was
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planned
in the place of
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storage
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room
and payroll
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office
.
In addition
to that, two larger size of
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information
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desk
was
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planned
in the area of processing and new customer
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office
and a combine fax and photocopier machine along with an
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information
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desk
was
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planned
in the central of main
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office
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room
. It is
also
worth noticing that the three separate
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room
such as manager’s
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office
, meeting
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room
and the cafeteria were in the same location in the question.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The two floor plans show the renovation of AAA Accountancy's main office.

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3 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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