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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v.5

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v. 5
The pie charts compare the expenditure of a school in the United Kingdom in three different years - 1981, 1991 and 2001, with a gap of a decade. It is clear from the pie charts that teachers’ salaries accounted for the highest percentage of the school’s expenses in all three years. By contrast, insurance was the smallest cost in each year. Now turning to the details, In 1981, 40% of the school’s budget went on teachers’ salaries. This figure rose to exactly the half of the total expense in 1991, before dropping back by 5% in 2001. The proportion of expenditure on other workers’ wages was considerably lower than that of teachers' salaries and it fell steadily over the 20-year period, from 28% of the budget in 1981 to 15% in 2001. Expenditure on insurance stood at only 2% of the total in 1981, being the lowest percentage of expense for the school, but rose to 8% in 2001. The expense percentages for resources and furniture/equipment of the school fluctuated. The cost ratio for resources was the highest in 1991, one-fifth of the total cost to be precise, and the percentage of spending on furniture and equipment reached its peak in 2001, at 23%.
The pie charts compare the expenditure of a
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in the United Kingdom in three
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1981, 1991 and 2001, with a gap of a decade. It is
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clear
from the pie charts that teachers’ salaries accounted for the highest
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percentage
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expenses in all three years. By contrast, insurance was the smallest cost in each year.

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turning to the
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details
, In 1981, 40% of the
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school’s
budget went on teachers’ salaries. This figure rose to exactly the half of the total
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expense
in 1991,
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dropping back by 5% in 2001. The proportion of expenditure on other workers’ wages was
considerably
lower than that of teachers' salaries and it fell
steadily
over the 20-year period, from 28% of the budget in 1981 to 15% in 2001. Expenditure on insurance stood at
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2% of the total in 1981, being the lowest
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of
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expense
for the
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school
,
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rose to 8% in 2001. The
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expense
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percentages
for resources and furniture/equipment of the
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school
fluctuated. The cost ratio for resources was the highest in 1991, one-fifth of the total cost to be precise, and the
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percentage
of spending on furniture and equipment reached its peak in 2001, at 23%.
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IELTS academic The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v. 5

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