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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v.4

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v. 4
The supplied pie charts compare the annual spending made by a school in the UK for three respective years which are 1981, 1991, and 2001. Overall, the salaries for teachers remained the highest portion in spending while insurance was the least expenses over the 20-year time frame. Based on the pie charts, aforementioned, teachers’ salaries constituted the highest percentages of the school cost which were 40%, 50%, and 45% for 1981, 1991, and 2001 chronologically. The expenses on resources such as books followed the trend of teachers’ salaries, went up in 1991 and dropped in 2001. In 2001, this expenditure stood at 9%. As for the other workers’ salary which was 28% in 1998, showed a dramatic drop to 15% in 2001. It is interesting to note that the percentage of furniture and equipment in 2001 overtook the percentage of other workers’ salaries and it showed a significant rise in 2001 even though it experienced a slight drop in 1991. This cost was 5% in 1991 and 23% in 2001. On the other hand, insurance accounted for the minimum percentage of expenditure over the time frame with 2% in 1991 and 8% in 2001.
The supplied pie charts compare the annual spending made by a school in the UK for three respective years which are 1981, 1991, and 2001.
Overall
, the
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salaries
for teachers remained the highest portion in spending while insurance was the least expenses over the 20-year time frame.

Based on the pie charts, aforementioned, teachers’
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salaries
constituted the highest
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percentages
of the school cost which were 40%, 50%, and 45% for 1981, 1991, and 2001
chronologically
. The expenses on resources such as books followed the trend of teachers’
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salaries
, went up in 1991 and dropped in 2001. In 2001, this expenditure stood at 9%. As for the other workers’
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salary
which was 28% in 1998,
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showed
a dramatic drop to 15% in 2001. It is interesting to note that the
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percentage
of furniture and equipment in 2001 overtook the
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percentage
of other workers’
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salaries
and it
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showed
a significant rise in 2001
even though
it experienced a slight drop in 1991. This cost was 5% in 1991 and 23% in 2001.
On the other hand
, insurance accounted for the minimum
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percentage
of expenditure over the time frame with 2% in 1991 and 8% in 2001.
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IELTS academic The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v. 4

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