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The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. v.2

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. v. 2
The given table presents the percentages of students who chose four different schools in three different years in secondary level. As an overall trend, Voluntary-controlled Schools were the most popular among secondary level students in 2000 while Community Schools gained its popularity among the pupils in 2009. As can be seen, more than half of the secondary students attended Voluntary-controlled Schools in 2000 while Grammar Schools stood at the second position with 24% pupils. Remaining 24% students were split equally between Specialists Schools and Community Schools. After five years, almost one-third pupils joined Community Schools which showed a 20% increase, while 38% students went to Voluntary-controlled schools, making it still the first choice of the secondary students. The students’ participation decreased by 5% and 1% in Grammar Schools and Specialised Schools respectively in this year. Finally, in 2009, there was a hike in the percentage of pupils who attended Community School which made it the most popular school type in this year. The percentage of attendants of other three schools dropped and all of them managed to gain 42% students in this year with 20% in Voluntary-controlled schools and remaining 22% in other two school types. In summary,   Community Schools were preferred by most of the students in 2009 and Voluntary-controlled Schools were popular in 2005 but not in 2009.
The
given
table presents the percentages of
students
who chose four
different
schools
in three
different
years in
secondary
level. As an
overall
trend, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
were the most popular among
secondary
level
students
in 2000 while
Community
Schools
gained its popularity among the
pupils
in 2009.

As can be
seen
, more than half of the
secondary
students
attended Voluntary-controlled
Schools
in 2000 while Grammar
Schools
stood at the second position with 24%
pupils
. Remaining 24%
students
were split
equally
between Specialists
Schools
and
Community
Schools
. After five years, almost one-third
pupils
joined
Community
Schools
which
showed
a 20% increase, while 38%
students
went to Voluntary-controlled
schools
, making it
still
the
first
choice of the
secondary
students
. The
students’
participation decreased by 5% and 1% in Grammar
Schools
and
Specialised
Schools
respectively
in this
year
.
Finally
, in 2009, there was a hike in the percentage of
pupils
who attended
Community
School
which made it the most popular
school
type in this
year
. The percentage of attendants of other three
schools
dropped and all of them managed to gain 42%
students
in this
year
with 20% in Voluntary-controlled
schools
and remaining 22% in other two
school
types.

In summary,
 
Community
Schools
were preferred
by most of the
students
in 2009 and Voluntary-controlled
Schools
were popular in 2005
but
not in 2009.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. v. 2

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