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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 v.38

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.
The bar chart illustrates the number of people who emigrated in five different countries over the period 2004 to 2007. What stands out from the chart is that Australia was the most popular destination as opposed to remaining nations. Regarding Australia, in 2004, the number of visitors stood at just over 40, 000. However, over the next two years, there was a marked rise in the numbers to around 52, 000, making it the maximum amount in 2006. And the quantity remained around this level until the end of the period. Turning to Spain, even though the amount remained fairly stable for the first two years, the total figure dropped gradually to finish just under 30, 000, which was still the highest total compared to New Zealand, the USA and France. While New Zealand witnessed around 20, 000 visitors each year, the total amount of guests in the USA fluctuated between 20, 000 and 25, 000. Although, the proportion of foreigners hit a peak of around 25, 000 in 2005, the net figure decreased sharply to approximately 15, 000 in 2006 representing the most least total than all four destinations.
The bar chart illustrates the number of
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people
who emigrated in five
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different
countries over the period 2004 to 2007. What stands out from the chart is that Australia was the most popular destination as opposed to remaining nations.

Regarding Australia, in 2004, the number of visitors stood at
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just
over 40, 000.
However
, over the
next
two years, there was a marked rise in the numbers to
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around
52, 000, making it the maximum amount in 2006. And the quantity remained
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around
this level until the
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end
of the period.

Turning to Spain,
even though
the amount remained
fairly
stable for the
first
two years, the
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total
figure dropped
gradually
to finish
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just
under 30, 000, which was
still
the highest
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total
compared to New Zealand, the USA and France. While New Zealand witnessed
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around
20, 000 visitors each year, the
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total
amount of guests in the USA fluctuated between 20, 000 and 25, 000. Although, the proportion of foreigners hit a peak of
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around
25, 000 in 2005, the net figure decreased
sharply
to approximately 15, 000 in 2006 representing the
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most least
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total
than all four destinations.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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