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The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. v.4

The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. v. 4
The given table shows data on households consumer items owned by British during the period of 11 years commencing from 1972. It is clearly visible that the percentage of households who owned consumer durables had seen a significant hike during this period. Television was most popular consumer item in this period while the dishwasher was the least common item. In details, television, vacuum cleaner, refrigerator and washing machine were owned by more than three-quarter house owners in Britain during 1972 to 1976. In subsequent years, the percentage of households owning these items had increased gradually and more than 90% British owned these items at their home. For instance, refrigerators were owned by 73% households in 1972, which saw a steady increase in the coming years and reached up to 94% in 1983. A similar trend could be observed for washing machine. On the contrary, central heating and telephones were owned by only one third and less than half of British households in 1972, but ownership of these items saw a steady increase too in later years and reached up to 64% and 77% respectively in 1983. Dishwashers were introduced in 1978 with 3% ownership and reached up to 5% in 1983, whereas, data for video is provided only for 1983 with 18% ownership in Britain.
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data on
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households
consumer
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items
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owned
by British during the period of 11 years commencing from 1972. It is
clearly
visible that the percentage of
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households
who
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owned
consumer durables had
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seen
a significant hike during this period. Television was
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most
popular consumer
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item
in this period while the dishwasher was the least common item.

In
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details
, television, vacuum cleaner, refrigerator and washing machine were
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owned
by more than three-quarter
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house
owners in Britain during 1972 to 1976. In subsequent years, the percentage of
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households
owning these
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items
had increased
gradually
and more than 90% British
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owned
these
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items
at their home.
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, refrigerators were
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owned
by 73%
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households
in 1972, which
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saw
a steady increase in the coming years and reached up to 94% in 1983. A similar trend could
be observed
for washing machine.

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, central heating and telephones were
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owned
by
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only
one third and less than half of British
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households
in 1972,
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ownership of these
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items
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saw
a steady increase too in later years and reached up to 64% and 77%
respectively
in 1983. Dishwashers
were introduced
in 1978 with 3% ownership and reached up to 5% in 1983, whereas, data for video
is provided
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only
for 1983 with 18% ownership in Britain.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. v. 4

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3 paragraphs
215 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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