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The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. v.2

The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. v. 2
The given presentation compares the percentages of electronic household appliances owned by British families from 1972 to 1983. In general, TV had always been popular among British and the dishwasher was the least common item during the given period in Britain. As is observed from the given data, almost one-third households in Britain had central heating machines in 1972 and the percentage increased each year and reached to 64% in 1983, which shows that the central heating machine users almost doubled in 12 years. Again, Television was the most common household equipment as 93% households had them. This ration reached to 98 percent with slight increase year by year. However, the video was introduced in 1983 when only 18% houses had them. Then Vacuum cleaner, refrigerator and washing machines were three most popular household appliances after TV which was owned by 70% house owners in 1972 and the percentages increased to over 90 after 10 years. Interestingly, dishwashers were very less popular as only 3% families owned them initially in 1978 and their user's percentages reached to only 5 in 1983. Finally, the percentage of houses that had telephones was only 42% but with their popularity, this percentage reached to 77 after 12 years. In conclusion, the television was the most popular consumer durable while the dishwasher was the least common type of durables the British people had during the years 1972 to 1983. Vacuum cleaner, refrigerator and washing machine were three other popular consumers’ durables for the given period in Britain.
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of electronic
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household
appliances
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owned
by British families from 1972 to 1983.
In general
, TV had always been
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popular
among British and the dishwasher was the least common item during the
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given
period in Britain.

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is observed
from the
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data, almost one-third
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households
in Britain had central heating
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machines
in 1972 and the
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percentage
increased each
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year
and
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reached
to 64% in 1983, which
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shows
that the central heating
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machine
users almost doubled in 12 years. Again, Television was the most common
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household
equipment as 93%
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households
had them. This ration
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reached
to 98 percent with slight increase
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by
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.
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, the video
was introduced
in 1983 when
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only
18%
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houses
had them. Then Vacuum cleaner, refrigerator and washing
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machines
were three most
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popular
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household
appliances after TV which was
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owned
by 70%
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house
owners in 1972 and the
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increased to over 90 after 10 years.
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, dishwashers were
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less
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as
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only
3% families
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them
initially
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5 in 1983.
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, the
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of
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houses
that had telephones was
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only
42%
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with their popularity, this
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percentage
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reached
to 77 after 12 years.

In conclusion
, the television was the most
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popular
consumer durable while the dishwasher was the least common type of durables the British
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people
had during the years 1972 to 1983. Vacuum cleaner, refrigerator and washing
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machine
were three other
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popular
consumers’ durables for the
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given
period in Britain.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. v. 2

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252 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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