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The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v.7

The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 7
The table illustrates the sales in a coffee shop in a building on a particular weekday. Overall, it is clear that the coffee shop has highest sales of all types of food and drink in the morning from 7. 30 to 10. 30 except sandwiches whereas the lowest sales for the coffee shop for all kinds of food and drink starts from 2. 30 to 5. 30 with an exception of pastries. Firstly, the coffee shop sells more foods and drinks in the morning section that are coffee (265), tea (110) and pastries (275) than any other section. The coffee shop has their second highest sales in the last section which starts from 5. 30 to 8. 30 for most of their foods and drinks except pastries, which has the lowest sales among the four sections. It is then followed by the period from 10. 30 to 2. 30. Interestingly, sandwiches have its peak sales from 10. 30 to 2. 30 (200). The business hours with the least sales in foods and drinks start from 2. 30 to 5. 30. Not forgetting to mention the fact that coffee is the best seller among all foods and drinks on a daily basis, it is followed by pastries. The third best seller in the shop is sandwiches and tea is the fourth.
The table illustrates the
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sales
in a
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coffee
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shop
in a building on a particular weekday.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the
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coffee
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shop
has
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highest
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sales
of all types of
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food
and
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drink
in the morning from 7. 30 to 10. 30 except sandwiches whereas the lowest
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sales
for the
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coffee
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shop
for all kinds of
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food
and
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drink
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starts
from 2.
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30
to 5.
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30
with an
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exception of
pastries.

Firstly
, the
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coffee
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shop
sells more
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foods
and
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drinks
in the morning
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section
that are
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coffee
(265), tea (110) and pastries (275) than any other
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section
. The
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coffee
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shop
has their second highest
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sales
in the last
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section
which
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starts
from 5. 30 to 8. 30 for most of their
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foods
and
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drinks
except pastries, which has the lowest
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sales
among the four
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sections
. It is then followed by the period from 10. 30 to 2. 30.
Interestingly
, sandwiches have its peak
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sales
from 10. 30 to 2. 30 (200). The business hours with the least
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sales
in
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foods
and
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drinks
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start
from 2. 30 to 5. 30.

Not forgetting to mention the fact that
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coffee
is the
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best seller
among all
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foods
and
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drinks
on a daily basis, it
is followed
by pastries. The third
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best seller
in the
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shop
is sandwiches and tea is the fourth.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 7

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
220 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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