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The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates protein and fat in three different diets v.2

The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates protein and fat in three different diets v. 2
The bar charts compare the differences in the proportion of carbohydrates, protein, and fat in 3 diets namely average diet, healthy diet and healthy diet for sport. Overall, as can be seen from the charts that carbohydrates contribute the largest percentage in all types of diets, while fat just accounts for a small amount. Units are measured in percentage. Sportspeople require a meal with the highest proportion of carbohydrates, at 60%, compared to that of an average diet and a normal healthy diet, just 40% and 50% respectively. The second largest element is protein and an average diet consists of the largest amount of protein, which makes up to 40%. It was then followed by the percentage of 30% of the protein in a healthy diet and the figure for a healthy sports diet is 5% lower than the former. Fat, the last compound surveyed constitutes exactly only one-fifth in both normal and healthy diets; however, the figure drops to just 15% for the healthy sports diet.
The bar charts compare the differences in the proportion of carbohydrates, protein, and
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fat
in 3 diets
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average diet,
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healthy
diet and
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diet for sport.

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seen
from the charts that carbohydrates contribute the largest percentage in all types of diets, while
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fat
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accounts for a
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amount. Units
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in percentage.

Sportspeople require a meal with the highest proportion of carbohydrates, at 60%, compared to that of an average diet and a normal
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healthy
diet,
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just
40% and 50%
respectively
. The second largest element is protein and an average diet consists of the largest amount of protein, which
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makes
up to 40%. It was then followed by the percentage of 30% of the protein in a
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healthy
diet and the figure for a
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healthy
sports diet is 5% lower than the former.

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Fat
, the last compound surveyed constitutes exactly
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only
one-fifth in both normal and
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healthy
diets;
however
, the figure drops to
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just
15% for the
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sports diet.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The table below gives information on the proportion of carbohydrates protein and fat in three different diets v. 2

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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