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The table below gives information about government expenditure in five sectors relating to domestic policy in Germany, Italy and the United Kingdom in 2009. v.2

The table below gives information about government expenditure in five sectors relating to domestic policy in Germany, Italy and the United Kingdom in 2009. v. 2
The table compares the proportion in each sectors in the government expenditure in three countries namely Germany, Italy and UK in 2009. As an overview, health sector accounted nearly the same stable rate in all three countries, while the least expenditure was environmental protection in 2009. According to the table, public service was really high at Italy and Germany with was the highest in Italy and the second highest in Germany, in UK, this sector just accounted for 4, 6% in government expenditure in 2009. Health was at approximately 7% in all three countries, and was the highest proportion in Germany and UK. While Education was take more attention in UK, it stood at 6, 4% and was the second sector that government focus much on, this sector just take about 4% in the others. Economic affairs stood at around 4% in three countries. Finally, environmental protection was not be focused much that the percentage was just under 1% with 0. 7% in Germany, 0. 9% in Italy and 1% in UK.
The table compares the proportion in each
sectors
in the
government
expenditure in three
countries
namely
Germany, Italy and UK in 2009.

As an overview, health
sector
accounted
nearly
the same stable rate in all three
countries
, while the least expenditure was environmental protection in 2009.

According to the table, public service was
really
high at Italy and Germany with was the highest in Italy and the second highest in Germany, in UK, this
sector
just
accounted for 4, 6% in
government
expenditure in 2009. Health was at approximately 7% in all three
countries
, and was the highest proportion in Germany and UK. While Education was take more attention in UK, it stood at 6, 4% and was the second
sector
that
government
focus much on, this
sector
just
take about 4% in the others. Economic affairs stood at around 4% in three
countries
.
Finally
, environmental protection was not
be focused
much that the percentage was
just
under 1% with 0. 7% in Germany, 0. 9% in Italy and 1% in UK.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below gives information about government expenditure in five sectors relating to domestic policy in Germany, Italy and the United Kingdom in 2009. v. 2

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