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The pie chart show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000 v.2

The pie chart show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000 v. 2
The pie chart compared the amount of visitors go to museums for some reasons that had changed from 1990 and 2000. As an overview, most people spend time at museums to learn and gain knowledge, it is the most reason during 10 years. There was a slight shift in almost the categories from 1990 to 2000, especially the reason that people visit for filling in the travel schedules. According to the pie chart, we can see clearly that nearly a half people visit museums for approaching and researching about the knowledge in 1990, and it still hold their place and accounted for 45% in the year 2000, be the most purpose over the ten-years period. Followed by being a part of travel, it stood at over one to forth in 1990, but it decreased significantly over a half of the 1990 rate, and was at 12% at the end of this period. While both family or friend time and attending a special exhibition was little low in 1990, just at 12%, there was upward trend through 10 years, Time for family and friend was at 17% and special exhibitions was be the second purpose with 18% in the end of this report. Buying art and others are not the main reasons for people with buying art and others just 1% and 4%, these rates had a bit change to 5% and 3% in 2000.
The pie chart compared the amount of visitors
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during 10 years. There was a slight shift in almost the categories from 1990 to 2000,
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visit for filling in the travel schedules.

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to 5% and 3% in 2000.
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IELTS academic The pie chart show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000 v. 2

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3 paragraphs
234 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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