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The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016. v.2

The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016. v. 2
The table illustrates the performance of three different branches of a chain of restaurants in three different locations in Vancouver for the year 2016. It is evident that the best performer is the branch in Georgia Street, which with 854 transactions a day on average has at least 100 more transactions than Dunsmuir Street and more than double from Drake Street. Georgia Street is also ahead in terms of average transaction value (ATV), with $10. 69 per transaction compared to Dunsmuir Street’s $5. 61 and Drake Street’s $9. 02. On average, eat-in and take-away transactions are almost equal in each restaurant, with take-away transactions ending slightly ahead in two of them. Drake Street is the only exception, with eat-in transactions surpassing take-away by 10. The table also gives us information about the most popular item in each branch, revealing that the eating habit of customers in each area are widely varied: Georgia Street’s best seller is Chicken Burger, while Dunsmuir Street’s customers favour Chicken Wings, and Drake Street’s customers prefer Chicken Pasta. Overall, it is clear that the Georgia Street’s branch is the company’s most profitable branch, with the highest number of transactions and ATV. Drake Street, on the other hand, lags far behind, despite the fact that its ATV is higher than Dunsmuir Street.
The table illustrates the performance of three
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of a chain of restaurants in three
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locations in Vancouver for the year 2016. It is evident that the best performer is the
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branch
in Georgia
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Street
, which with 854
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transactions
a day on average has at least 100 more
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transactions
than
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Dunsmuir
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Street
and more than double from Drake
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Street
. Georgia
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Street
is
also
ahead in terms of average
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transaction
value (ATV), with $10. 69 per
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transaction
compared to
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Dunsmuir
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Street’s
$5. 61 and Drake
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Street’s
$9. 02.

On average, eat-in and take-away
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transactions
are almost equal in each restaurant, with take-away
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transactions
ending
slightly
ahead in two of them. Drake
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Street
is the
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exception, with eat-in
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transactions
surpassing take-away by 10.

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also
gives us information about the most popular item in each
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branch
, revealing that the eating habit of customers in each area are
widely
varied: Georgia
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Street’s
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best seller
is Chicken Burger, while
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Dunsmuir
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Street’s
customers
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favour
Chicken Wings, and Drake
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Street’s
customers prefer Chicken Pasta.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the Georgia
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Street’s
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branch
is the
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company
’s most profitable
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branch
, with the highest number of
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transactions
and ATV. Drake
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Street
,
on the other hand
, lags far behind, despite the fact that its ATV is higher than
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Dunsmuir
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Street
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about a restaurant’s average sales in three different branches in 2016. v. 2

Academic
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4 paragraphs
215 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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