Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland. v.2

The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland. v. 2
The table shows how people in different age groups spend their leisure time in Someland over the course of a year. Overall, the amount of leisure time available varies considerably across the age groups and people of different age levels have very different ways of spending their leisure time. According to the figures, as people age in Someland, their time for socialising reduces. Teenagers and people in their twenties spend around 500 and 350 hours per year on socialising with a group of more than 4 people. Although the total hours of socialising in their 30s, 40s, 50s and 60s are fairly constant (between 300-350), socialising with more than 4 people drops dramatically to 50 hours in the 30s and 40s age groups. Group and individual exercise follow a similar pattern. People of all ages spend a good part of their leisure time on entertainment such as enjoying TV/ video and cinema. In both cases, teenagers and retired people spend around twice as much time as those who are at working age. Home entertainment ranges from just over a thousand hours for teenagers and retired people and an average of 600 hours for everyone else. Cinema accounts for 100 hours of the teenagers and retired people’s leisure and 25-50 hours for the rest. It is worth noticing that there is a significant trend towards solitary and smaller group activities as people grow older.
The table
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Someland
over the course of a year.
Overall
, the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
available varies
considerably
across the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
levels have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
ways of spending their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
time.

According to the figures, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Someland
, their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for
Possible spelling mistake. 'socialising' is British English.
socialising
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduces
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Teenagers
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in their twenties
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
around 500 and 350
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
per year on
Possible spelling mistake. 'socialising' is British English.
socialising
with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
of more than 4
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Although the total
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
of
Possible spelling mistake. 'socialising' is British English.
socialising
in their 30s, 40s, 50s and 60s are
fairly
constant (between 300-350),
Possible spelling mistake. 'socialising' is British English.
socialising
with more than 4
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
drops
dramatically
to 50
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
in the 30s and 40s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
groups
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Group
and individual exercise follow a similar pattern.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
of all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ages
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
part of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
on entertainment such as enjoying TV/ video and cinema. In both cases,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
and retired
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spend
around twice as much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
as those who are at working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
. Home entertainment ranges from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
over a thousand
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
and retired
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and an average of 600
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
for everyone else. Cinema accounts for 100
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teenagers
and retired
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leisure
and 25-50
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hours
for the rest. It is worth noticing that there is a significant trend towards solitary and smaller
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
group
activities as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
grow older.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
233 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts