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The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland. v.1

The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland. v. 1
The data presented in the table outlines how much leisure time people from different age groups spend yearly in Someland. It is obvious that watching TV is a popular form of free-time activity for Somelanders. According to the figures, watching TV is a common recreation among people in Someland, teenagers and elder people watch TV even more. They spend over a thousand hours per year to watch different TV programmes while it ranges from 400 to 700 hours among others. Young people have more friends to socialize while this number decreases when they grow up. Teens spend as much as 350 hours socializing with 4 or more friends while it is only 25 to 50 hours for adults and elders. On the contrary, people in their thirties spend the highest time socializing with fewer people. Individual exercise is preferred by people in their 30s and 40s while group exercise is more popular among teenagers. Elder people mostly refrain from doing exercises in their free time. Watching cinema is not a common leisure activity among  Somelanders and teenagers spend 100 hours doing so which is higher than time spent in this pursuit by citizens of other ages.
The data presented in the table outlines how much leisure
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Someland
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Somelanders
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people
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Someland
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teenagers
and elder
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people
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watch
TV even more. They
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spend
over a thousand
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hours
per year to
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watch
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different
TV
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programmes
while it ranges from 400 to 700
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hours
among others. Young
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people
have more friends to socialize while this number decreases when they grow up. Teens
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spend
as much as 350
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hours
socializing with 4 or more friends while it is
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only
25 to 50
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for adults and elders.
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people
in their thirties
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spend
the highest
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time
socializing with fewer
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people
. Individual exercise
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by
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people
in their 30s and 40s while group exercise is more popular among
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teenagers
. Elder
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people
mostly
refrain from doing exercises in their free
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time
. Watching cinema is not a common leisure activity among
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Somelanders
and
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teenagers
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spend
100
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doing
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which is higher than
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time
spent in this pursuit by citizens of other ages.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below gives data on the hour of leisure time per year for people in Someland. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
196 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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