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The plan below show the layout of a university's sport center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v.2

The plan below show the layout of a university's sport center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 2
given are two maps concerning the alocation of the elements and features of a sport complex in a university. The first plan illustrates the present layout while the second one shows the complex after reconstrsction. Overall, many new features will be added to the sport center such as a cafe and a sports shop and all the elements of the center will be altered in some way exept for the 25m pool. The current plan is consist of three separate areas. one big in the middle with rectangular shape and two simillar ones in the same forms on the east and west side of it. The center on has a entrance in the south side which leads to a reception, and a 25m pool in the center with seating, gym and changing room surrounding it. Two outdoor courts are located on the west and east of sport center outside it. In the future all the areas will be atteched together and a large area consisted of all the elements will be formed. The outdoor courts will be eliminated and a leisurepool with changing room and a sport hall with its changing room will be constructed on the west and east of the sport center. The old gym will be extended to east to make it bigger and two dance studios will be built on the east of sports hall. On the east side of reception a cafe and on its west side a sports shop will be opened.
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given
are two maps concerning the
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alocation
of the elements and features of a
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sport
complex in a university. The
first
plan illustrates the present layout while the second one
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shows
the complex after
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reconstrsction
.
Overall
,
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many
new features will be
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added
to the
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sport
center such as a
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cafe
and a
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shop and all the elements of the center will
be altered
in
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some
way
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exept
for the
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25m
pool.

The
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current
plan is consist of three separate areas.
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one
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big
in the middle with rectangular shape and two
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simillar
ones in the same forms on the east and west side of it. The center on has
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a
entrance in the south side which leads to a reception, and a
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25m
pool in the center with seating, gym and changing room surrounding it. Two outdoor courts
are located
on the west and east of
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sport
center outside it.

In the future all the areas will be
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atteched
together and a large area consisted of all the elements will
be formed
. The outdoor courts will
be eliminated
and a
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leisurepool
with changing room and a
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sport
hall with its changing room will
be constructed
on the west and east of the
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sport
center. The
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old
gym will
be extended
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to east to
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make
it bigger and two dance studios will
be built
on the east of
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hall. On the east side of reception a
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cafe
and on its west side a
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sports
shop will
be opened
.
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IELTS academic The plan below show the layout of a university's sport center now, and how it will look after redevelopment. v. 2

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