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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v.6

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v. 6
Pie charts supplied reveal information about the units of electricity production in two countries - Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Five kinds of fuel sources namely coal, oil, natural gas, hydropower and nuclear power were used for producing electricity in these two countries. To begin with, the main source of power in Australia was coal and it produced 50 units of electricity in 1980 which was half of the total production. Natural gas and hydropower were used to generate 40 units of electricity in this year. After 20 years there was a rapid increase in the usage of coal that generated 130 units among the total 170 units. However, there was a gradual fall on the usages of natural gas and oil as it supplied tiny fractions of the total electricity produced this year in Australia. On the contrary in France coal, natural gas and oil were mainly used to produce necessary electric power while in later years the use of nuclear power increases tremendously. While only 15 units of electricity were generated using this source in 1980, it increased to 126 in 2000. Use of hydropower and natural gas was being replaced by this new energy source.
Pie charts supplied reveal information about the
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production in two countries
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Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Five kinds of fuel
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sources
namely
coal, oil,
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natural
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gas
, hydropower and nuclear
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power
were
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used
for producing
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electricity
in these two countries.

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begin
with, the main
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source
of
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power
in Australia was coal and it produced 50
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units
of
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electricity
in 1980 which was half of the total production.
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Natural
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gas
and hydropower were
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used
to generate 40
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units
of
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electricity
in this
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year
.
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After
20 years there was a rapid increase in the usage of coal that generated 130
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units
among the total 170
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units
.
However
, there was a gradual fall on the usages of
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natural
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gas
and oil as it supplied tiny fractions of the total
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electricity
produced this
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year
in Australia.

On the contrary
in France coal,
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natural
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gas
and oil were
mainly
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used
to produce necessary electric
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power
while in later years the
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use
of nuclear
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power
increases
tremendously
. While
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only
15
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units
of
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electricity
were generated
using this
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source
in 1980, it increased to 126 in 2000.
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Use
of hydropower and
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natural
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gas
was
being replaced
by this new energy
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source
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v. 6

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200 words
6.0
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