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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v.4

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v. 4
The given pie charts illustrate the changes on the fuel sources for making electricity in two different countries in 1980 and 2000. From this chart, we can immediately observe that the total production of electricity in 2000 was around twice as it was in 1980, both in Australia and France. However, the amount of electricity production by different fuel sources was quite different in both countries. For Australia, in 1980, there were 20 units and 10 units of electricity produced by natural gas and oil, respectively. Dramatically, in 2000, the demand of both of these sources got decreased, and only 4 units of electricity were produced. Moreover, no significant changes happened in the amount of electricity made by hydropower in 1980, and 2000 as well. However, as a fuel source that hasn’t been used in Australia, nuclear power seems to be more popular in France, which made 15 units in 1980. In 2000, apparently, nuclear power became the main fuel source for producing electricity. 126 units of electricity were made from this source, which was 8 times as many as the amount in 1980. Furthermore, there was no change in the usage of coal for make electricity between 1980 and 2000. In contrast, the amount of electricity made by coal increased significantly, compared with in 1980. All in all, there was a lot of change on the different fuel sources for making the amount of electricity in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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pie charts illustrate the
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changes
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fuel
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sources
for making
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electricity
in two
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different
countries in 1980 and 2000. From this chart, we can immediately observe that the total production of
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electricity
in 2000 was around twice as it was in 1980, both in Australia and France.
However
, the
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amount
of
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electricity
production by
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different
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fuel
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sources
was quite
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in both countries.

For Australia, in 1980, there were 20
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units
and 10
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units
of
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electricity
produced by natural gas and oil,
respectively
.
Dramatically
, in 2000, the demand of both of these
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sources
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decreased, and
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4
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units
of
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electricity
were produced
.
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, no significant
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changes
happened in the
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amount
of
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electricity
made by hydropower in 1980, and 2000
as well
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, as a
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source
that hasn’t been
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in Australia, nuclear power seems to be more popular in France, which made 15
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in 1980. In 2000,
apparently
, nuclear power became the main
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fuel
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source
for producing
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electricity
. 126
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of
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electricity
were made
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, which was 8 times as
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as the
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in 1980.
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, there was no
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change
in the usage of coal for
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make
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electricity
between 1980 and 2000.
In contrast
, the
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amount
of
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electricity
made by coal increased
significantly
, compared with in 1980.

All in all, there was
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change
on the
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fuel
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sources
for making the
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amount
of
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electricity
in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. v. 4

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