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The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. v.2

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. v. 2
The pie chart delineates how the UAE administration spent the national budget in 2000. It is obvious that social security and health and personal social services received the largest proportion of incentives from the 315 billion Dirham' national budget in this year in the United Arab Emirates. As is presented in the diagram, the UAE administration’s budget in 2000 was 315 billion Arab Emirates Dirham and 100 billion of it went on maintaining citizens’ social security. Just over 53 billion was allocated for the health and social services which was the second largest allocation by the USA government. Budget allocation for education, defence and debt interests were 38, 22 and 23 billion Dirhams respectively. Housing heritage and environment sector was allotted 15 billion Dirham which was 6 billion higher than the allocation for transportation. The UAE government shared only 9 billion Dirham, the least, for its transportation sector in 2000 while other expenditure accounted for 23 billion.
The pie chart delineates how the UAE administration spent the national
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budget
in 2000. It is obvious that
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social
security and health and personal
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social
services received the largest proportion of incentives from the 315
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billion
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Dirham
' national
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in this year in the United Arab Emirates.

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is presented
in the diagram, the UAE administration’s
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budget
in 2000 was 315
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billion
Arab Emirates
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Dirham
and 100
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billion
of it went on maintaining citizens’
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social
security.
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over 53
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billion
was allocated
for the health and
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services which was the second largest allocation by the USA
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government
.
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Budget
allocation for education,
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defence
and debt interests were 38, 22 and 23
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billion
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Dirhams
respectively
. Housing heritage and environment sector
was allotted
15
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billion
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Dirham
which was 6
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billion
higher than the allocation for transportation. The UAE
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government
shared
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only
9
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billion
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Dirham
, the least, for its transportation sector in 2000 while other expenditure accounted for 23
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billion
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. v. 2

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2 paragraphs
157 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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