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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live v.1

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live v. 1
The pie chart illustrates the country of birth of people living in Australia and there is a table that shows the distribution of nationalities in different areas. Overall, most of the population in Australia is indigenous, but they are mainly live in rural areas. Predominantly cities are filled with individuals from China. Almost 99% of Chinese people live in urban areas whereas only 1% live in rural areas, but there are Chinese persons who are only 2% of the total population of Australia. UK population is the second population in Australia but 10 times less than indigenous individuals and makes only 7% of the total population. Likewise Chinese, they are also mostly expanded in cities and only 11% live in the countryside. The same number has people from the Netherland with distribution of 90% living in cities and 10% living in rural areas and they are only 1% of the total population in Australia. People from New Zealand are in third place after the UK who have 3% of the total population, and they are the same as other countries mostly live in urban areas.
The pie chart illustrates the country of birth of
people
living in Australia and there is a table that
shows
the distribution of nationalities in
different
areas.

Overall
, most of the
population
in Australia is indigenous,
but
they are
mainly
live
in rural
areas
.
Predominantly
cities
are filled
with individuals from China.

Almost 99% of Chinese
people
live
in urban
areas
whereas
only
1%
live
in rural
areas
,
but
there are Chinese persons who are
only
2% of the
total
population
of Australia. UK
population
is the second
population
in Australia
but
10 times less than indigenous individuals and
makes
only
7% of the
total
population
.
Likewise
Chinese, they are
also
mostly
expanded in cities and
only
11%
live
in the countryside. The same number has
people
from the
Netherland
with distribution of 90% living in cities and 10% living in rural
areas and
they are
only
1% of the
total
population
in Australia.
People
from New Zealand are in third place after the UK who have 3% of the
total
population
, and they are the same as other countries
mostly
live
in urban
areas
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live v. 1

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3 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
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