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The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household and the table shows the amount of eletricity used according to the number of occupants Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compari v.2

The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household and the table shows the amount of eletricity used according to the number of occupants
The pie graph illustrates seven aspects of the energy used in a typical Australian household, and in addition, the table depicts different amount of electricity used in various number of people in the house. According to the pie chart, it is clear to see that the biggest part of household energy comes to the heating ＆ cooling, with 38%. And the percentage of water heating is 25%, which is the second biggist part. Then, there are two same part of the household energy use, which is lighting and fridges ＆ freezers, with both is 7%. The last two part of the energy using are cooking and standby power, with 4% and 3% respectively. What' s more, the proportion of other appliances, including clothes and dishwashers, entertainment and small appliances, is 16% which is coming to the third place. As for the table, we can see that the amount of electricity used increases as the number of people in the house rises. When there is only one people, the amount of electricity is about 5000----6500 Kwh per year, and if the people number comes to two and three, the electricity used amount is 6000----8000 Kwh per year and 7500----10000 Kwh per year, respectively. If the people number is six or more, the amount of electricity is almost three times bigger than that of electricity used in one people house, with 12000----16000 Kwh per year. In conclusion, heating ＆ cooling is the part of household using electricity most, and also more people in house will use more electricity.
The pie graph illustrates seven aspects of the
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in a typical Australian
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amount
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used
in various
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number
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people
in the
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According to the pie chart, it is
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to
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that the biggest
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household
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to the heating ＆ cooling, with 38%. And the percentage of water heating is 25%, which is the second
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biggist
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part
. Then, there are two same
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of the
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household
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energy
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, which is lighting and fridges ＆ freezers, with both is 7%. The last two
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of the
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using are cooking and standby power, with 4% and 3%
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appliances, is 16% which is coming to the third place.

As for the table, we can
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that the
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increases as the
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people
in the
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rises. When there is
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only
one
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, the
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is about 5000----6500
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per year, and if the
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people
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number
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to two and three, the
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used
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is 6000----8000
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per year and 7500----10000
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Kwh
per year,
respectively
. If the
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people
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number
is six or more, the
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electricity
is almost three times bigger than that of
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in one
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people
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, with 12000----16000
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Kwh
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most, and
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in
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will
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more
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household and the table shows the amount of eletricity used according to the number of occupants

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