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The fist chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari v.1

The fist chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The pie charts illustrate two things. First one shows how energy is being consumed by an average Australian home. Second one depicts the amount of greenhouse gas emitted as a direct result of that energy consumption. Overall, a big chunk of power is being used up for heating homes and water for domestic use. However, greenhouse gas emitted by all the work mentioned in graph shows variation, because water heating and appliances take the lead in that category. Firstly, the energy usage by an average home for heating is the most, at 42 percent. It is followed by water heating at 30 percent, while house hold appliances take the third place. The least amount of energy used was on cooling surprisingly, at only 2 percent. Secondly, the hazardous gas emissions was topped by water heating, at 32 percent. Emitting gasses closely behind that was everyday home gadgets at 28 percent, whereas heating the homes came at third place. The least amount of polluting gasses were produced by cooling homes, at only 3 percent.
The pie charts illustrate two things.
First
one
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how
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energy
is
being consumed
by an average Australian home. Second one depicts the amount of greenhouse gas emitted as a direct result of that
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energy
consumption.

Overall
, a
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big
chunk of power is being
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used
up for
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heating
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homes
and
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water
for domestic
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use
.
However
, greenhouse gas emitted by all the work mentioned in graph
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shows
variation,
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because
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water
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heating
and appliances take the lead in that category.

Firstly
, the
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energy
usage by an average home for
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heating
is the most, at 42
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percent
. It
is followed
by
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water
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heating
at 30
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percent
, while
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house
hold appliances take the third place. The least amount of
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energy
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used
was on cooling
surprisingly
, at
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only
2 percent.

Secondly
, the hazardous gas emissions
was topped
by
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water
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heating
, at 32
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percent
. Emitting gasses
closely
behind that was everyday home gadgets at 28
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percent
, whereas
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heating
the
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homes
came at third place. The least amount of polluting gasses
were produced
by cooling
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homes
, at
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only
3
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percent
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The fist chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
173 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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