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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. v.2

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. v. 2
The table data presents information about the types of Australian families who were poverty-stricken in 1999. It also shows the number and proportion of such impoverished families for the same year. Overall, more than 1. 83 million Australian families were poor in 1999 and it comprised just over one-tenth of the total Australian households. Furthermore, poverty was more prevalent among soles parents and singles without any children. As the data suggest, one out of five sole parents in Australia was destitute and it was the highest percentage of poverty among the given family types in 1999. The higher number of poor family, however, were the couples with children accounting for approximately one million households. 7% couples without children, on the other hand, were not affluent. 19% Single Australians without any child were needy while this rate among the elder citizens was fewer - 6% single ages person and 4% aged couple were poor and the total number of such families were 54, 000 and 48, 000 respectively.
The table data presents information about the types of Australian
families
who were poverty-stricken in 1999. It
also
shows
the number and proportion of such impoverished
families
for the same year.

Overall
, more than 1. 83 million Australian
families
were poor in 1999 and it comprised
just
over one-tenth of the total Australian households.
Furthermore
, poverty was more prevalent among soles parents and singles without any children.

As the data suggest, one out of five sole parents in Australia was destitute and it was the highest percentage of poverty among the
given
family
types in 1999. The higher number of poor
family
,
however
, were the couples with children accounting for approximately one million households. 7% couples without children,
on the other hand
, were not affluent. 19% Single Australians without any child were needy while this rate among the elder citizens was fewer
-
6% single ages person and 4% aged couple were poor and the total number of such
families
were 54, 000 and 48, 000
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. v. 2

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