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The given table chart shows data about the total value in billions of dollars of imported fish to the US while the bar chart illustrate percentage of shown countries in terms of fish provision to the US. v.2

The given table chart shows data about the total value in billions of dollars of imported fish to the US while the bar chart illustrate percentage of shown countries in terms of fish provision to the US. v. 2
The given table chart shows data about the total value in billions of dollars of imported fish to the US while the bar chart illustrate percentage of shown countries in terms of fish provision to the US. Overall, an increase can be seen in the total value of imported fish in the period of 12 years. Also, the primary source of fish imported to the US came from China and Canada in shown time. As is observed from the graph that in 1988 the total value of imported fish gained 6. 57 billions of dollars. In the following 4 years, this figure had risen considerably to reach 8. 52 billions of dollars. Additionally, this tendency proceeded in the period of next 8 years, 10. 72 billions of dollars was the total value that was spent on to import fish. It is interesting to note in 1988 that 60% of the quality of imported fish was from Canada. However, this proportion was only halve in 2000, at approximately 28%. Regarding contribution of china, this nation provided 13% in total but had an upsurge in 2000, with the figure reaching 30%. The percentage of others showed a rise remarkably, climbing from 27% in 1998 to 46% in 1992. Subsequently, the period of 1992 to 2000 witnessed a slightly decline and stood at 42% in the share.
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shows
data about the
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total
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value
in
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billions
of
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dollars
of
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imported
fish to the US while the bar chart illustrate percentage of shown countries in terms of fish provision to the US.
Overall
, an increase can be
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seen
in the
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total
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value
of
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imported
fish in the period of 12 years.
Also
, the primary source of fish
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imported
to the US came from China and Canada in shown time.

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As
is observed
from the graph that in 1988 the
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total
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value
of
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imported
fish gained 6. 57
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billions
of
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dollars
. In the following 4 years, this figure had risen
considerably
to reach 8. 52
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billions
of
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dollars
.
Additionally
, this tendency proceeded in the period of
next
8 years, 10. 72
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billions
of
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dollars
was the
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total
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value
that
was spent
on to import fish. It is interesting to note in 1988 that 60% of the quality of
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imported
fish was from Canada.
However
, this proportion was
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only
halve in 2000, at approximately 28%. Regarding contribution of china, this nation provided 13% in
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total
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but
had an upsurge in 2000, with the figure reaching 30%. The percentage of others
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showed
a rise
remarkably
, climbing from 27% in 1998 to 46% in 1992.
Subsequently
, the period of 1992 to 2000 witnessed a
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slightly decline
and stood at 42% in the share.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The given table chart shows data about the total value in billions of dollars of imported fish to the US while the bar chart illustrate percentage of shown countries in terms of fish provision to the US. v. 2

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
224 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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