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The picture below show the differences in the layout of conference centre between its present and its future plan Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The picture below show the differences in the layout of conference centre between its present and its future plan
The given maps illustrates the layout of a conference centre and its proposed to changes for future. Overall, the number of meeting room will be increased in future building. There will changed the size of the car park, the garden, the hall and the meeting rooms. Presently, people can enter the reception through a door. There is a cafe next to the reception in east and the toilet are on the other side. The two meeting rooms is planed on west wall of building. However, the hall is on the opposite wall with approximately same dimension as addition of meeting rooms. The garden and the car park amenities also available following to the main center in east direction. According to future plan, the cafe will be replaced by fitness centre and cafe will be shifted at north side of hall, included with the separate kitchen. The two meeting rooms will be converted in to three. The garden will become double compare to present size, and the size of present car park will be reduced. The car parking will direct connect with main road; as the parking road will be included into the car parking space.
The
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given
maps illustrates the layout of a conference
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centre
and
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its
proposed to
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changes
for future.

Overall
, the number of
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meeting
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room
will
be increased
in future building. There will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "change"
changed
the size of the
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car
park, the garden, the hall and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
rooms.

Presently
,
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people
can enter the reception through a door. There is a
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
next
to the reception in east and the toilet are on the other side. The two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
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rooms
is planed
on west wall of building.
However
, the hall is on the opposite wall with approximately same dimension as addition of
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meeting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rooms
. The garden and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
park amenities
also
available following to the main center in east direction.

According to future plan, the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
will
be replaced
by fitness
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
and
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
will
be shifted
at north side of hall, included with the separate kitchen. The two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
meeting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rooms
will
be converted
in to three. The garden will become double compare to present size, and the size of present
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
park will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
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car
parking will direct connect with main road; as the parking road will
be included
into the
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car
parking space.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS academic The picture below show the differences in the layout of conference centre between its present and its future plan

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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