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The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005 v.2

The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005 v. 2
The maps describe the changes taking place in Youngsville in New Zealand from 1980 to 2005. It is possible to see from the maps that the town witnessed a complete transformations. Looking at the maps in more detail, we can see that the town was under-developed in 1980, but during the next 25 years, it saw a number of dramatic changes. There were a significant change at northern river called Alanah. A green area where surrounded a lake in the north-west was cleared to make space for a stadium and two car parking facilities. Also, a golf court was erected in the north-west corner of this town. At southern River Alanah, another noticeable change is many tress in the center of this area was chopped down, and replaced by many factories and warehouses. Moreover, a housing area next to railway line was converted into skyscrapers. Further developments were a construction of Marina at the mouth of the river together with the extension of the railway line along the coastline to the north of this region
The maps
describe
the
changes
taking place in
Youngsville
in New Zealand from 1980 to 2005. It is possible to
see
from the maps that the town witnessed a complete
transformations
.

Looking at the maps in more detail, we can
see
that the town was under-developed in 1980,
but
during the
next
25 years, it
saw
a number of dramatic
changes
. There were a significant
change
at northern river called
Alanah
. A green area where surrounded a lake in the north-west
was cleared
to
make
space for a stadium and two car parking facilities.
Also
, a golf court
was erected
in the north-west corner of this town.

At southern River
Alanah
, another noticeable
change
is
many tress
in the center of this area
was chopped
down, and replaced by
many
factories and warehouses.
Moreover
, a housing area
next
to railway line
was converted
into skyscrapers.
Further
developments were a construction of Marina at the mouth of the river together with the extension of the railway line along the coastline to the north of this
region
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 year period from 1980 to 2005 v. 2

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3 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
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