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The two maps below shows road access to a city hospital in 2017 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where necessary. v.2

The two maps below shows road access to a city hospital in 2017 and in 2010.
the maps illustrate how the road access to city hospital changed in 2010 compared to 2017. overall, in comparison with 2007, in 2010, significant changes were done. Not only changing location of the parking area but also the new two roundabouts were constructed. in 2017, both staff and public car parks were located together on the east side of the hospital road. In 2010 the public car park shifted to east part of the Ring road while the staff car park remained at the same place. Another important changes had been the changing of the bus stop and constructing two new roundabouts giving access to the newly built bus station. The bus stop which was scattered on the both sides of the hospital road converted to a bus station which is now located on the south-east side of the Ring road. Apart from those changes the other roads and construction remained unchanged.
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access to city hospital
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changed
in 2010 compared to 2017.

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overall
,
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with 2007, in 2010, significant
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changes
were done
. Not
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changing location of the parking area
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also
the new two roundabouts
were constructed
.

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in
2017, both staff and public car parks
were located
together on the east side of the hospital
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road
. In 2010 the public car park shifted to east part of the Ring
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road
while the staff car park remained at the same place.

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important
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changes
had been the changing of the bus
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stop
and constructing two new roundabouts giving access to the
newly
built bus station. The bus
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stop
which
was scattered
on the both sides of the hospital
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road
converted to a bus station which is
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now
located on the south-east side of the Ring
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road
. Apart from those
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changes
the other
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roads
and construction remained unchanged.
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IELTS academic The two maps below shows road access to a city hospital in 2017 and in 2010.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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