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The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010 v.2

The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010 v. 2
The maps illustrate data on a school site in 2004 and some proposed changes to the school in 2010. It is clear that the principal changed to the school was the expand of some buildings while it is also noticeable that the trees were remained untouched. Looking at the maps of Hogwarts grammar school, as it was 2010, we can clearly see that a new car park was constructed which was located in the North west. In addition the main road which leaded to the outside in 2004, was redesigned to connect the two car parks together. In 2010, the sport field was reduced in size to make room for the extension of the school buildings which was divided into three sections in 2007. The walking path from the school building to the sport field had been demolished in order to build a new path to connect all of the school buildings
The maps illustrate data on a
school
site in 2004 and
some
proposed
changes
to the
school
in 2010.

It is
clear
that the principal
changed
to the
school
was
the expand
of
some
buildings
while it is
also
noticeable that the trees
were remained
untouched.

Looking at the maps of Hogwarts grammar
school
, as it was 2010, we can
clearly
see
that a new car park
was constructed
which
was located
in the North west. In
addition
the main road which leaded to the outside in 2004,
was redesigned
to connect the two car parks together.

In 2010, the sport field was
reduced
in size to
make
room for the extension of the
school
buildings
which
was divided
into three sections in 2007. The walking path from the
school
building
to the sport field had
been demolished
in order to build a new path to connect
all of the
school
buildings
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010 v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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