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The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010. v.1

The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010. v. 1
The provided map displays how an American town transformed, by providing how it looked in two different years - 1948 and 2010. A quick look suggests that with the exception of the town's southeast residential area, new structures have been built and changes have been made, but the overall area neither expanded nor contracted. To begin with, it can be seen that the factories on the north-east corner were demolished to build an airport and several commercial buildings. Similarly, a supermarket replaced a lake which had been next to the factories. It is also worth noticing that four commercial buildings were also constructed on the southwest of the new supermarket. They were located on both sides of a big road, with two on each side. A church in the south direction back in 1948 was replaced by a sports stadium in 2010. On the other hand, several features of this town did not change throughout the period. The natural elements, a canal and trees to be specific, remain untouched. The road system did not change either, with 2 small and 2 big roads. Additionally, the petrol station in the north was kept intact and so were residential houses on the bottom right corner, unlike those on the other side of the canal.
The provided map displays how an American town transformed, by providing how it looked in two
different
years
-
1948 and 2010. A quick look suggests that
with the exception of
the town's southeast residential area, new structures have
been built
and
changes
have
been made
,
but
the
overall
area neither expanded nor contracted.

To
begin
with, it can be
seen
that the factories on the north-east corner
were demolished
to build an airport and several commercial buildings.
Similarly
, a supermarket replaced a lake which had been
next
to the factories. It is
also
worth noticing that four commercial buildings were
also
constructed on the southwest of the new supermarket. They
were located
on both sides of a
big
road, with two on each side. A church in the south direction back in 1948
was replaced
by a sports stadium in 2010.

On the other hand
, several features of this town did not
change
throughout the period. The natural elements, a canal and trees to be specific, remain untouched. The road system did not
change
either, with 2
small
and 2
big
roads.
Additionally
, the petrol station in the north was
kept
intact and
so
were residential
houses
on the bottom right corner
, unlike those on the other side of the canal.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and 2010. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
212 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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