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The map below is of the town of Gralsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v.2

The map below is of the town of Gralsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v. 2
The map represents the map of town called Garlsdon and there are possible two sites for the new supermarket in Garlsdon. Overall, Gralsdon has the total population of 65000. For +the convenience reasons, the first site would be better places to build a new supermarket. The first site suggested, is located outside of the centre of Garlsdon, basically in the countryside. However, it is located closer to Hindon town (of 12km away) which has population of 10, 000. Also railway and main road are located nearby, which will provide the convenience use of transportation systems to draw further population from Cransdon (with 29000 populations) which is 25 km away from Garlsdon and Bransdon (with 15000 populations) which is 16km away from Garlsdon. In contrast, the possible sites for the second option are located in the centre of Garlsdon, surrounding by housing and industry complexes. However, it only has railway line as the main transportation.
The map represents the map of town called
Garlsdon
and there are possible two
sites
for the new supermarket in
Garlsdon
.

Overall
,
Gralsdon
has the total
population
of 65000. For +the convenience reasons, the
first
site
would be better places to build a new supermarket.

The
first
site
suggested, is
located
outside of
the
centre
of
Garlsdon
,
basically
in the countryside.
However
, it is
located
closer to
Hindon
town (of
12km
away) which has
population
of 10, 000.
Also
railway and main road are
located
nearby, which will provide the convenience
use
of transportation systems to draw
further
population
from
Cransdon
(with 29000
populations)
which is 25 km away from
Garlsdon
and
Bransdon
(with 15000
populations)
which is
16km
away from
Garlsdon
.

In contrast
, the possible
sites
for the second option are
located
in the
centre
of
Garlsdon
, surrounding by housing and industry complexes.
However
, it
only
has railway line as the main transportation.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS academic The map below is of the town of Gralsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
154 words
6.0
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