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The graphs show enrolment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology in 1999. v.1

The graphs show enrolment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology in 1999. v. 1
The given graphs show the students’ enrollment in the Higher College of Technology for the year 1999. As is presented in the graphs, Dubai University had the largest number of male and female enrolled in 1999 and majority of those students achieved their certificates than other degrees. According to the graphs, more women got enrolled in the Higher College of Technology and the number ranges from 100 to almost 600. Among the enrolled students, the number of females was more than the male. No data for the male graduate was given and for higher diploma and certificate courses, women exceeded the number of males. According to the pie chart, half of the enrolled for certification courses while 27% had been in Diploma courses. 20% of the total students got enrolled in higher diploma while only 3% got enrolled in bachelor degree. In summary, the number of diploma and certificate students was significantly more than the number of bachelor degree students in Higher College of Technology and female superseded the male in terms of their number on those courses.
The
given
graphs
show
the
students’
enrollment in the Higher College of Technology for the year 1999. As
is presented
in the graphs, Dubai University had the largest
number
of male and female enrolled in 1999 and
majority of
those
students
achieved their certificates than other degrees.

According to the graphs, more women
got
enrolled in the Higher College of Technology and the
number
ranges from 100 to almost 600. Among the enrolled
students
, the
number
of females was more than the male. No data for the male graduate was
given
and for higher
diploma
and certificate
courses
, women exceeded the
number
of males.

According to the pie chart, half of the enrolled for certification
courses
while 27% had been in
Diploma
courses
. 20% of the total
students
got
enrolled in higher
diploma
while
only
3%
got
enrolled in bachelor degree.

In summary, the
number
of
diploma
and certificate
students
was
significantly
more than the
number
of bachelor degree
students
in Higher College of Technology and female superseded the male in terms of their
number
on those
courses
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs show enrolment in different colleges in the Higher Colleges of Technology in 1999. v. 1

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178 words
6.5
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