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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. v.3

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. v. 3
The given line graph represents the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers between 1975 to 2000; 25 years long gap. Here Pizza and hamburgers were continuously consumed more than the fish and chips which are consumed in high quantity in 1975, but after that, the rate fell down slowly. Firstly in 1975 Australian teenagers consumed fish and chips in high percentage which is about 100 times eaten, while on the other hand, the ratio of hamburgers and pizza in 1975 is just 5 times which depicts that their eating rate is less than the other one. After that from 1980 to 1985, Fish & chips eating ratio gets down as compared to pizza and hamburgers which show a high ratio in Australian teenagers. After 1985 to onwards, Proportion of fish and chips gets down and down in Australian teenagers while on the other hand Pizza and hamburgers become prominent and their eating percentage grow up on the top level. And finally one can say that hamburgers were taken high rank in eating as compared to others among the Australian teenagers. And the hamburger graph line is just above the remaining lines. So from this, we conclude that Australian teenagers were interested in fish and chips than others. While after few years they get interested in hamburgers mostly and also interested in pizza. This can clearly justify from the graph lines.
The
given
line graph represents the consumption of
fast
food by Australian
teenagers
between 1975 to 2000
; 25 years long gap. Here Pizza and hamburgers were
continuously
consumed more than the fish and chips which
are consumed
in
high
quantity in 1975,
but
after that, the rate fell
down
slowly
.

Firstly
in 1975 Australian
teenagers
consumed fish and chips in
high
percentage which is about 100 times eaten, while on the
other
hand, the ratio of hamburgers and pizza in 1975 is
just
5 times which depicts that their
eating
rate is less than the
other
one. After that from 1980 to 1985, Fish & chips
eating
ratio
gets
down
as compared to pizza and hamburgers which
show
a
high
ratio in Australian
teenagers
.

After 1985 to onwards, Proportion of fish and chips
gets
down
and
down
in Australian
teenagers
while on the
other
hand Pizza and hamburgers become prominent and their
eating
percentage grow up on the
top level
. And
finally
one can say that hamburgers
were taken
high
rank in
eating
as compared to others among the Australian
teenagers
. And the hamburger graph line is
just
above the remaining lines.

So
from this, we conclude that Australian
teenagers
were interested
in fish and chips than others. While after few years they
get
interested in hamburgers
mostly
and
also
interested in pizza. This can
clearly
justify from the graph lines.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. v. 3

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231 words
6.0
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