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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v.3

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v. 3
The charts present data on pop, rock and classical music album purchase by different age groups of British male and female. It is worth noticing that rock music is more popular among the young people while classical music is preferred by the Britons over 45 years old. According to bar graphs, more than a quarter British males purchased rock music albums while less than 10% preferred classical music. Similarly 8% Britons female purchased rock music albums while 6% from this same category purchased classical music. This data depicts that more British men purchased music albums than women. According to age group, rock music is more preferred by 25 to 34 years British who purchased around 31% rock music. These people bought only 17% classical music. 16 to 24 years old British purchased 29% rock music while their percentage for buying classical music is significantly less, only 1%. Rock music is also popular than classical music among the 35 to 44 years age group who bought 14% rock music albums compared to the only 3% classical music purchase. But a completely different trend can be observed among the British over 45 years who prefer classical music over the rock and pop music. People from this age group purchased 20% classic music albums while the rock music albums they purchased amount only 8-10 percentage.
The charts present data on pop,
rock
and
classical
music
album
purchase
by
different
age
groups
of British male and female. It is worth noticing that
rock
music
is more popular among the young
people
while
classical
music
is preferred
by the Britons over 45 years
old
.

According to bar graphs, more than a quarter British
males
purchased
rock
music
albums
while less than 10% preferred
classical
music
.
Similarly
8% Britons female
purchased
rock
music
albums
while 6% from this same category
purchased
classical
music
. This data depicts that more British
men
purchased
music
albums
than women.

According to
age
group
,
rock
music
is more preferred by 25 to 34 years British who
purchased
around 31%
rock
music
. These
people
bought
only
17%
classical
music
. 16 to 24 years
old
British
purchased
29%
rock
music
while their percentage for buying
classical
music
is
significantly
less,
only
1%.
Rock
music
is
also
popular
than
classical
music
among the 35 to 44 years
age
group
who
bought
14%
rock
music
albums
compared to the
only
3%
classical
music
purchase
.
But
a completely
different
trend can
be observed
among the British over 45 years who prefer
classical
music
over the
rock
and pop
music
.
People
from this
age
group
purchased
20% classic
music
albums
while the
rock
music
albums
they
purchased
amount
only
8-10 percentage.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
68Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v. 3

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