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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v.2

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v. 2
The three provided graphs represent data on the type of music albums purchased by the different age groups in Britain. As is observed, Rock is most popular music type among the three music categories and people purchasing classical music album are mostly over 45 years and male listeners purchased more album than that of females. In all cases, men purchase more music albums than women did. Rock and pop music are more popular among young British while classical among the people over 45 years. The market of rock music albums is mainly dominated by men with a purchase record of over 30% compared to 16% purchase done by women. From the first graph, it is obvious that interest in pop music seems steady among the population who aged from 16 to 44 and after people turn to 45 years, they continue to buy pop type music albums, the ratio decreases nevertheless. Among the Britons of 16 to 34 years old, the rock music is most revered. Opposite to the classic music graph, the interest in rock music keeps falling after people reach their mid-thirties and a sharp fall after the age 45 is visible.
The three provided graphs represent data on the type of
music
albums
purchased
by the
different
age groups in Britain. As
is observed
,
Rock
is
most
popular
music
type among the three
music
categories and
people
purchasing classical
music
album
are
mostly
over 45 years and male listeners
purchased
more
album
than that of females.

In all cases,
men
purchase
more
music
albums
than women did.
Rock
and pop
music
are more popular among young British while classical among the
people
over 45 years. The market of
rock
music
albums
is
mainly
dominated by
men
with a
purchase
record of over 30% compared to 16%
purchase
done by women. From the
first
graph, it is obvious that interest in pop
music
seems steady among the population who aged from 16 to 44 and after
people
turn to 45 years, they continue to
buy
pop type
music
albums
, the ratio decreases
nevertheless
.

Among the Britons of 16 to 34 years
old
, the
rock
music
is most revered. Opposite to the classic
music
graph, the interest in
rock
music
keeps
falling after
people
reach their mid-thirties and a sharp fall after the age 45 is visible.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v. 2

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