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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v.1

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. v. 1
The given charts enumerate the percentage of pop, rock and classical music album purchasers based on their sex and age group in Britain. As a general trend, men were dominant music album purchasers in every kind of music genre. In pop music, buyers from 16-34 years old were well ahead than other age groups. 16-25 years old pop album purchasers stood close to that of 25-34 years old and they combinedly purchased more than 60% pop albums sold in Britain. Almost 28% pop albums were purchased by males while this was less than 20% by females. People over 45 years old were less enthusiastic about pop and rock music while their main interest was classical music. With regards to rock music album purchase, a striking similarity between the purchasing trends of pop and rock music albums could be observed. Nevertheless, rock music was the most popular music genre for both male and female prefered pop music. On the other, classical music was most preferred by the people who were over 45 years old and they purchased 20% music albums of this music type. However, young Britons were quite less enthusiastic about classical music with their 1-2 percent purchase of the album of this genre. Interestingly, British people from 25-34 age group preferred classical music while British citizens from 35-44 did not.
The
given
charts enumerate the percentage of pop,
rock
and
classical
music
album
purchasers based on their sex and age group in Britain. As a general trend,
men
were dominant
music
album
purchasers in every kind of
music
genre.

In pop
music
, buyers from 16-34 years
old
were well
ahead
than other age groups. 16-25 years
old
pop
album
purchasers stood close to that of 25-34 years
old and
they
combinedly
purchased
more than 60% pop
albums
sold in Britain. Almost 28% pop
albums
were
purchased
by males while this was less than 20% by females.
People
over 45 years
old
were less enthusiastic about pop and
rock
music
while their main interest was
classical
music
.
With regards to
rock
music
album
purchase
, a striking similarity between the purchasing trends of pop and
rock
music
albums
could
be observed
.
Nevertheless
,
rock
music
was the most popular
music
genre for both male and female
prefered
pop music.

On the other,
classical
music
was most preferred by the
people
who were over 45 years
old and
they
purchased
20%
music
albums
of this
music
type.
However
, young Britons were quite less enthusiastic about
classical
music
with their 1-2 percent
purchase
of the
album
of this genre.
Interestingly
, British
people
from 25-34 age group preferred
classical
music
while British citizens from 35-44 did not.
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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