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The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment. v.2

The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment. v. 2
The given diagram shows the stages of manufacturing and process adjustment of the consumer goods.   As is observed from the flowchart, the goods manufacturing is a complex process which is done in several stages and information is sometimes fed back to earlier stages to make some adjustments. Firstly, raw materials and other components are stored together and production planning is done. Two major process involves in the overall manufacturing process: one is manufacturing process itself and another one is the information feedback process with which the adjustment of the manufacturing is done. After the product research, the design part is done and this input is used in product planning stage. After the production planning is complete the assembly, inspection, testing and packaging stages are done sequentially. Feedback from testing phase is used in the design stage and which led back to product planning stage. Again, the market research affects the design and advertising stages and inputs from the market research stage are used in the packaging stage. The final two stages are dispatch and sales. The information flow stage gives feedback to other stages to refine and adjust the process. In summary, the consumer goods manufacturing process involves both the multi-staged manufacturing and research methods. The manufacturing stages involve the storage, assembly, inspection, packing to the sales methods whereas the research stages include market & product research, design and advertisement.
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adjustment of the consumer
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manufacturing
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which
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stages
and information is
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fed back to earlier
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to
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some
adjustments.

Firstly
, raw materials and other components
are stored
together and production
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planning
is done
. Two major
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involves in the
overall
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manufacturing
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process
: one is
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itself and another one is the information feedback
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process
with which the adjustment of the
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manufacturing
is done
. After the
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product
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research
, the
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part
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. After the production
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is complete the assembly, inspection, testing and packaging
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are done
sequentially
. Feedback from testing phase is
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and which led back to
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planning
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stage
. Again, the market
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research
affects the
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design
and advertising
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stages
and inputs from the market
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research
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are
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in the packaging
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stage
. The final two
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stages
are dispatch and sales. The information flow
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stage
gives feedback to other
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stages
to refine and adjust the process.

In summary, the consumer
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goods
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manufacturing
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process
involves both the multi-staged
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manufacturing
and
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research
methods. The
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manufacturing
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stages
involve the storage, assembly, inspection, packing to the sales methods whereas the
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research
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stages
include market &
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product
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research
,
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design
and advertisement.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
231 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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