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The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Australia between 1995 anhd 2000. v.2

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Australia between 1995 anhd 2000. v. 2
The line graph illustrates the expenditure on books of four different countries from 1995 to 2005. It is evident that the wages used to buy books increased in all four countries and Germanny was the country spent the most money on books. In 1995, Italian only spent exactly 50 millions on books. This figure rose to 55 millions in 1997 then fell slightly to less than 50 millions before reached a peak of 62 millions in 2005 which is the lowest number among four contries. In constrast, from the lowest spending in 1995, at 30 millions, the money Australian spent on books increased steadily to 40 millions in 1999 and grown sharply to more than 70 millions at the end of the period, slightly higher than that of Italian. French spent 55 millions on buying books in 1995 then this figure rose to 70 millions in 2001 and reached 75 millions in 2005. The money German used for books increased from 80 millions at the beginning to 95 millions at the end of period after decreased slightly to 85 millions in 2003. This figure remained the highest one thoughout 10 - year period.
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books
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different
countries from 1995 to 2005.

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used
to
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buy
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books
increased in all four countries and
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Germanny
was the country
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spent
the most money on books.

In 1995, Italian
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only
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spent
exactly 50
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millions
on
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books
. This figure rose to 55
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millions
in 1997 then fell
slightly
to less than 50
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millions
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before
reached a peak of 62
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millions
in 2005 which is the lowest number among four
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contries
. In
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, from the lowest spending in 1995, at 30
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millions
, the money Australian
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spent
on
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books
increased
steadily
to 40
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millions
in 1999 and grown
sharply
to more than 70
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millions
at the
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end
of the period,
slightly
higher than that of Italian.

French
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55
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millions
on buying
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books
in 1995 then this figure rose to 70
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millions
in 2001 and reached 75
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millions
in 2005. The money German
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used
for
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books
increased from 80
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millions
at the beginning to 95
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at the
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end
of period after decreased
slightly
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in 2003. This figure remained the highest one
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thoughout
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IELTS academic The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Australia between 1995 anhd 2000. v. 2

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